TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

There are certain considerations one can take into account to investigate and examine the influence of young adults on the future of the whole society. Someone contends that they do not have much impact on it because they are still relatively young, while I assert that our society's development is actually always under the influence of young people, not only because of their great power assisted by technology, but also because of their knowledge and thoughts.

First and foremost, the world alters swiftly these days, and everyone is experiencing a huge change in various aspects including transportation, health care and communication due to the advancement of technology. No one could deny the fact that our world will be defined and shaped by technology in the future, and it is those young man who know the technology better than any other age groups. Therefore, their deep understanding and skills in technology provides them more opportunities to make decisions in the workplace and influence the world greatly. Just imagine how Facebook has connected the people around the globe and pose influence on both people's daily life and business.

Furthermore, young people's knowledge from high-qualified education is another noticeable factor. After entering the 21 century, more and more youths in developing countries started to have an access to universities due to a soar in investment from their governments, which makes sure that they could learn more advanced knowledge and techniques compared to their parents' generation. With a huge number of new workforce with a college degree entering their careers, it is vividly clear they will bring some profits and make contributions that cannot be ignored and replaced.

Last but not least, an additional support comes into my mind is cooperation between young people with different culture context. Owing to the trend towards internationalization and market liberalization, young people are absolutely more open-minded, making them more willingly to work together with peers from other countries, which is of vital importance if a enterprise or organization wants to remain competent these days. For example, in an international company, it is always those young people who explore overseas market and make huge profits for their bosses. By doing so, they are actually influencing our society even without our notice.

Due to the aforementioned ground, I confidently claim that young adult have the ability to influence the society and change the world we live in

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r entering the 21 century, more and more youths in developing countries started t...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...in developing countries started to have an access to universities due to a soar in invest...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ntries, which is of vital importance if a enterprise or organization wants to rem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35929648241 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00772659701 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582914572864 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.4489973278 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.357142857 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150774833858 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538599132033 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246705628185 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843591029044 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185119046648 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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