TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

It is totally accepted this fact that education has a crucial impact on childrens today's lives. No one can deny the effect of education on childrens' lives. A controversial question which is most of the time raised regarding this issue is that why educating children is a more difficult activity today? In other words, I agree with this statement that today it is a more difficult for teachers and parents to educate children than it was in the past. In what foloows, I will pinpoint my point of view through reasons and examples.
One of the reasons coming to mind is that every children in their lives need to educate in the highschool, home, and so on. In fact, education certainly in near future will be usefl for all of the children. On the other hand, children must be controled by their parents in their home and teachers in the highschool. In this way, techers are more involved today from the past because of high intelligence of today's children. Hence, parents and teachers have a key role in this trend. Parents and childrens and all everone who are facing with the education's problem must be act accurately. In other words, children ask different questions form their parents or their parents in order to sole their puzzle which created in their own mind. An empirical study which recently conducted in all over the world reveal this fact that childrens' today are more involved in their homes or highschools because present different matter which 10 years ago childrens couldn't present. This means that children nowadays is very intelligence and teachers and parents sometimes cannot answer to their questions.
Another equally important reason is that form a pyschological standpoint, because of today's children are more using from cell phone, online games, and social networks, teachers don't govern them in highschool. In fact, these items which are presented can cause children soon learn various subjects in their lives. In other words, teachers and parents maybe cannot protect them and are faced with different problem in order have to do activities which take a long time form them to solve childrens' probelms. In this way, pschologists suggest that teachers and parents too learn new technologies in order can satisfy the demand of children. In addition, teachers in hichschool can encourage children to do a specific activity to get their answer form them.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that educating childrens are more difficult task in contrast of the past. Because of this matter, teachers and parents and other must increase their knowledge in order to answer to childrens' questions. All in all, it is anticipated that with progress of cell phone, online games and somrthing like that educating childrens are more difficult and take a more time in near future.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 186, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tainly in near future will be usefl for all of the children. On the other hand, children m...
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Line 2, column 545, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'educations'' or 'education's'?
Suggestion: educations'; education's
...and all everone who are facing with the educations problem must be act accurately. In othe...
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Line 2, column 950, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ent matter which 10 years ago childrens couldnt present. This means that children nowad...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ne games, and social networks, teachers dont govern them in highschool. In fact, the...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... form them to solve childrens probelms. In this way, pschologists suggest that tea...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to learn'?
Suggestion: to learn
...gists suggest that teachers and parents too learn new technologies in order can satisfy t...
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Line 3, column 639, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...der can satisfy the demand of children. In addition, teachers in hichschool can en...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, regarding, so, in addition, in contrast, in fact, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96588486141 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59027698752 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441364605544 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6979678783 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.863636364 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230544659866 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855030685239 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769304089077 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180691074187 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643055003548 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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