TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

A glance at modern education methods brings to light a question that has several times provoked debate, namely, whether or not had the advent of technology has made educating children more difficult. Some might contend that the use of cell phones and the Internet can facilitate education because it brings information within a click on the mouse. Nonetheless, I would like to suggest that cell phones, online games, and social networking websites severely interfere with children's education in terms of their attention,time and the way they learn.

First and foremost, technologies like social networking website deprive students of their invaluable time. At present, it is not uncommon for students to spend a large amount of time on their digital devices. For instance, some children socialize with their friends through cell phone applications whenever they have something to share, others spend several hours playing online games till late night. All of these activities are a waste of time and shorten the time they can use to read and think.

Secondly, today's children find it more difficult to concentration in classes than before. Thanks to the development of Information Technology, people now have access to the Internet almost everywhere. As a result, students tend to chat with their friends or playing online games in the classroom, which undeniably distracts them from their studies. Were they to learn knowledge well, they would have to fully concentrated in the classes, regardless of how smart they are.

Admittedly, there are justifications for those who argue that with modern technology, education is becoming increasingly easier. Cell phones, for example, make teachers more reachable for students than ever before, and the Internet brings all the libraries around the globe on to the students' desks. However, I still affirm that technology makes knowledge fractured and shallow, and it is textbooks and classes that offers systematic and organized knowledge. So relying on new technologies to learn can easily get students bewildered.

Due to the aforementioned ground, education has been more difficult a task today, since students consume too much time on cell phones, online games and social networking websites, and distracted attention and limited time to learn are two prime and conspicuous reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... several times provoked debate, namely, whether or not had the advent of technology has made e...
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Line 1, column 520, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , time
...ns education in terms of their attention,time and the way they learn. First and fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, for instance, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43131868132 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83152478442 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56043956044 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1606403842 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.5625 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277091780332 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851126473223 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645929708552 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159391021357 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064687228205 0.0645574589148 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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