TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Nowadays, children access to the vast majority of information in various fashions. Some people think that teaching them is very easy while others disagree. From my estimation, I believe that education methods should be changed due to thriving children information, increasing availability of information and being in touch with others in different ways.

First, undoubtedly educating children comparison to the past have been difficult. With the advent of technology, an explosion of information have occurred in all over the world and the information of children and other people have thrived. When teachers want to teach student in an old procedure, it will be less attractive. Because all students have a good learning such as internet, cell phone. Thus teachers must improve their knowledge if they want to educate them correctly.

Second, children can access to the most information so instantly than that of when we were student. All questions can be answered immediately by searching on the internet after a while and so it increase the responsibility of teachers to promote their information and provide extra information about subjects. For instance when an educator decides to explain how the computers work to student he or she must give some information that student have never heard before participating in class. Therefore, progressing in availability of data can be mentioned as a prominent issue for teaching new generation of kids.

Finally, todays children have an smart phone which can be in touch with who they want and whenever they need. By expending in technology the shape of instrument are altering quickly and by new devices people can have communication from wherever of the world by social networks. This point for student is taken place and some of them connect to the various social network. Teaching them will be more difficult in contrast to the past and will be more complicated than that of the past. Student can share their information and can solve their problems by sharing with friends. In terms of children education, teachers have to give students some add which are considered in distinguish aspects. Hence, being member of social network and keeping in touch with together can make a drawback for teachers incredibly.

In sum, due to aforementioned reasons i strongly believe that educating methods should be changed and teacher if they want to be a well educator, they force to be up to date and adopt themselves to new information about class topics.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 398, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... learning such as internet, cell phone. Thus teachers must improve their knowledge i...
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Line 6, column 196, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
...on the internet after a while and so it increase the responsibility of teachers to promo...
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Line 8, column 31, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...kids. Finally, todays children have an smart phone which can be in touch with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in contrast, such as, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2024691358 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88795384256 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1128621057 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.35 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131318257642 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490756107043 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407017748743 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772275854837 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403370255403 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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