It is universally conferred that rapid growth of technologies, especially in the field of information technology (IT), has strongly influenced people lives. IT devices like cell phones and software like online games have surrounded people such that people spend much time to work with. In addition to adults, children are considered as suitable targets for IT market. Many people believe that the advantages of technologies for children outweigh their disadvantages but I do not think so. In my point of view, technologies have negatively affected children, and their performance in school has decreased. I feel this way because of two reasons which I will explore them in the following essay.
First of all, children using IT devices like smartphones are going to bed later than previous. They are absorbed to their smartphones and work with them for long hours. Specifically, most of the children are into social networking apps and spend their time by chatting with strangers while they do not know it is a waste of time. Apart from the danger behind chatting with strangers, sleeping late at nights make them tired during the day that they are present in school. Since they had not enough sleep, they can not focus on the courses and fully understand them.
Moreover, at day time, which the children are present at school, they are thinking of their activities in the internet. For example, since the online game "clash of clans" has been introduced, many teenagers have installed the app on their smartphones. When they are at school, instead of focusing on their course stuff, they are distracted and worried about getting an attack and losing the game. In this regard, they do not listen to their teachers and just think about the game. As a result, they do not learn the courses and their grade completely show it. In addition, such teenagers prefer playing the games to study hard because playing games makes them happy and excited while studying courses make them bored!
To sum up, I think, currently, almost all of children do not know about the proper use of technologies and these technologies, instead of being advantageous, are more detrimental. They distract children from the right way and convert them to persons that only think about enjoyment not working hard. However, I do not deny the potential of technologies to positively influence on children at all. If we teach our children the proper use of technologies, without any doubt, we can see the strong positive impact of technologies on our children.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'while', 'apart from', 'for example', 'i feel', 'i think', 'in addition', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229473684211 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.181052631579 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0505263157895 0.0866891130778 58% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0673684210526 0.046263068375 146% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0842105263158 0.0685040099705 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.153684210526 0.118717715034 129% => OK
Participles: 0.0589473684211 0.0351676179071 168% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.73663481543 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0189473684211 0.0309702414327 61% => OK
Particles: 0.00210526315789 0.00188951952338 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.0610526315789 0.0887237588012 69% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00631578947368 0.0209618222197 30% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00631578947368 0.0139019557991 45% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2542.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 421.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03800475059 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339667458432 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261282660333 0.251872472559 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.187648456057 0.174417080927 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12351543943 0.112833075102 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73663481543 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532066508314 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 60.8384681117 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0476190476 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7777491261 48.84282405 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.047619048 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.644075263715 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 46.1758850809 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.32911392405 1.45489161554 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268139419543 0.300154397459 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107205855998 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0514738836079 0.0752933317313 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.496735971536 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.104287924036 0.151897553556 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106309111239 0.114077575197 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354648608621 0.0781384742642 45% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.381061794973 0.336927656856 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0821801974491 0.067059652881 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19277819995 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343563226413 0.0618886996521 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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