TPO 44 Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Employed parents usually find it quite difficult to dedicate proper amount of time to their children. More important than that is the activity they decide to do with them. Should this time be for schoolwork? Or, should it be a fun activity to cheer them up? I personally believe that the second option is more considerate one according to three reasons.

To start, lack of presence of parents can lead to irreversible side effects in child's mental health. Therefore, planning fun activities with children when parents are around can help to build beautiful memories that can prevent this issue. Managing to make a appropriate and meaningful use of the time spent with young children can have a huge impact on their daily lives and assist in making children less aware of their parent's absence for other times.

As well as that, schoolwork is rather frustrating and annoying for children. Maybe if parents put so much pressure on them while their assignments, they turn out to hate it more and be more distant from learning in the right way. However, it is essential to be restricted and tough in this area. But monitoring them during that period does not seem to be helpful.

Last but not least, parents could take advantage of the fun activities to teach their children about important things that are not usually taught at school. They can talk about ethics and manner. Also, practice communication and social skills. Children learn much more when they do something themselves than when they are just told. Additionally, family adventures can be a phenomenal way to practice teamwork and participation which is an important criteria for their adulthood.

To conclude, even though parents should manage to spend enough time with their children, if that is not possible for them due to working hours, they should at least try to make the most of the time they are able to spend with them. I sincerely believe that using that time to make fun and adventurous memories is much better than spending it to help them in their schoolwork.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...an prevent this issue. Managing to make a appropriate and meaningful use of the t...
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Line 7, column 452, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criterion'?
Suggestion: criterion
...and participation which is an important criteria for their adulthood. To conclude, e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, at least, as well as, as well as that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1699.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91040462428 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58196032022 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537572254335 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3786762566 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4210526316 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2105263158 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248681496894 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710586015164 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696539911185 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144442609251 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760001965378 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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