TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

There are certain considerations or factors that everyone can take into account to investigate or examine people’s opinion. I certainly believe that busy parents should put their time playing with their children instead of schoolwork. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs represent conspicuous reasons to elaborate my preference.

The first reason comes to my mind is strong and good relationship between parents and their children. when parents put their time to play with their children it increases the quality of their relationship. It is necessary for parents to keep their connection well with youngsters because it plays an integral role in their success in future. For instance, if parents are like friends of their child they tell them the truth in any situation.

Furthermore, recent researches by scientists show that playing with youngster rise their self-confidence and other good features of personality. Psychologists claim that parents should play with their kid at least once a week in order to build their brave personality. For example David beckham, a famous soccer player wrote in his biography that his father always played soccer with him every nights when he came back from his work. Therefore, it made him confident and brave. Besides, he added it is the secret of his success in his life.

additionally, parents can teach their children essential materials and make them ready for future. Interestingly, It can raise their energy and prevents depression. For instance they can play chess. Playing chess not only waste their time but also raise their focus and other mental ability. In fact, they enjoy their time and learn new techniques which may be useful in future.

Due to aforementioned ground, I think that all folks should bear in mind that parents should put their free time playing with their children. strong connection and self-confidence and teaching sports are prime and conspicuous supports.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, for instance, i think, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33644859813 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85531311032 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579439252336 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6488855685 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.65 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.05 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238449519723 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776168801701 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820870580338 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14305257334 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331678157486 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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