TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

I strongly believe that, in compared with older people, the youth are more inspired from celebrities, because of imitation, having more time and being inexperienced.
First of all, the youth are often looking forward for the high social status. In my opinion, since famous people possess higher prestige, earn good salaries and are always major subjects in magazines and newspaper, it gives the younger individuals enough reasons to follow their lifestyle regularly. In other words, celebrities are symbol of success, wealth and happiness for them and as a result, they try to imitate from them more than older people.
In addition, owing to the rapid development in technology, the news about super stars and famous entertainers are mainly spread via the internet and since, teenagers have more free time, this news will be more interesting for them and try to spend several hours in the internet in order to read their celebrities' opinions. Unlike the youth, the older people have to work very hard and do not have enough time, so it is not very important for them to follow this news.
Moreover, I believe that the younger people are likely to be influenced by other famous individuals due to lack of experience in their lives. Nowadays, the media tend to report the fashion lifestyle of celebrities, which appear to be quite attractive to youth. Since they are inexperienced, they do not find out that all those expensive clothes, which these famous people wear, are just as an advertisement. Therefore, they try to act and behave like them. In contrast, the older people have enough experience in their lives, so they know that the real life is not like that the celebrities show and as a result, it is not interesting for them to follow the lifestyle of super stars.
To summarize, I conclude that the younger people are more interested to follow the celebrities rather than older ones, because they have more free time, less experience and tend to mimic their lifestyles.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ate from them more than older people. In addition, owing to the rapid developmen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95495495495 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65504868463 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501501501502 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6532582791 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227266382481 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871939803833 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480606411115 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14090711566 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236473504482 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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