TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, celebrities are considered very important to people. the famous people are always on TV, and they say their thoughts on television to the whole nation, in order to make people to adapt the same type of thinking. One of the most controverisial question regarding this subject is that whether young people or older people are affected more by famous people opinions'. In my perspective, younger people believe more to what is celebrities opinion about a perticular topic for few reasons which I will elaborate more.
First of all, young people tend to watch public media more than older people. Nowadays, due to presence of internet, young people give much of their time watching and reading news through social medias, and celebrities have multiple sources of spreading their thoughts on internet. As the result, young people are aware of celebrities thoughts' more than older people. For example, I'm interested in jennifer lopez, and I have followed her youtube channel, instagram account, facebook page, and her instagram. Jennifer Lopez, in the previous US election, supported Donals Trump, so many of her fans voted for Trump because of her, while my parents did not know that Jennifer supported Trump because they did not have facebook to follow her.
Furthermore, lots of famous entertainers and athletes are young. People are interested more to those people who fall in their age range, and because of the fact that most celebrities are young teenagers and adults; younger persons feel a closer relation to them and care about their opinions more while most of old celebrities have been retired and older people don't hear from them anymore. A research indicates that more than 90% of the stuff working in CNN, are below 30 years old.
Finally, old people trust their own opinion more than otheres thoughts. Old people have lived in this world more, so they are more experienced, and consider themselves wiser than any people. That is why they don't listen to what celebrities think of a specific subject because most of them don't have enough experience to be believed by old people.
To wrap it up, based on what I mentioned before, young people consider celebrities point of view more important than older people do because young people have access to celebrities' official web pages, and most of these famouse people tend to be in a young age range. besides that, old persons consider themselves wiser than celebrities.
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Essay evaluation report
One of the most controverisial question
One of the most controverisial questions
Sentence: One of the most controverisial question regarding this subject is that whether young people or older people are affected more by famous people opinions'.
Error: controverisial Suggestion: controversial
Sentence: In my perspective, younger people believe more to what is celebrities opinion about a perticular topic for few reasons which I will elaborate more.
Error: perticular Suggestion: particular
Sentence: Finally, old people trust their own opinion more than otheres thoughts.
Error: otheres Suggestion: others
Sentence: To wrap it up, based on what I mentioned before, young people consider celebrities point of view more important than older people do because young people have access to celebrities' official web pages, and most of these famouse people tend to be in a young age range. besides that, old persons consider themselves wiser than celebrities.
Error: famouse Suggestion: famous
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.832 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.615 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.21 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...re considered very important to people. the famous people are always on TV, and the...
^^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ts more than older people. For example, Im interested in jennifer lopez, and I hav...
^^
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...people who fall in their age range, and because of the fact that most celebrities are young teenagers an...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ties have been retired and older people dont hear from them anymore. A research indi...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
...der people dont hear from them anymore. A research indicates that more than 90% of the stu...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...wiser than any people. That is why they dont listen to what celebrities think of a s...
^^^^
Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...a specific subject because most of them dont have enough experience to be believed b...
^^^^
Line 10, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...people tend to be in a young age range. besides that, old persons consider themselves w...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04176904177 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53960176364 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503685503686 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.9356776466 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.705882353 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245381650095 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984274836669 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048117644121 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158953814036 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332433206502 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.