TPO-47: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In the bustling lives of today’s people, lots of news and information from all around the world are always swirling about the media and social networks. Although some might be indifferent to what is happening across the globe, as they think it does not affect their everyday lives, others argue that it is quite necessary to stay informed of all the broadcasts. I, personally, have to agree with the later, believing it is essential to stay in tune with all that is happening around the world.
With the vast spread of social networks and media across the globe, we have become connected with people from far and near. This connection has caused us to be affected by all that is going on in the world, even in the most distant countries. Although, some might not feel this universal connection, the politics of every country is influenced by all the events from other countries, and these political decisions directly impact the lives of all the civilians. In other words, even though a particular event in a distant country might not seem important at first, it could have a great impact on the political decisions made and thus, influencing the lives of normal citizens. For this reason, it is very important to be informed of all the happenings from around the word so we can make better decisions when voting for particular politicians. By this means, we can help ensure that the most suitable politicians are employed in the government, politicians that will make the decisions most suited for our lives.
Another reason that comes to mind is that by being aware of the different events from all around the world, we could gain a deeper insight of life and humanity. Seeing the struggles of people in distant lands could lead to a raised awareness and consciousness of life. With this increased awareness, we could try to help struggled people in near or distant lands and promote peace. In this way, we can all unite to help create a better world for the generations to come.
In general, I believe it is quite important to be informed of all that is happening in countries near and far. Even though the news might be overwhelming for some people, it is essential to be aware of different events so we could make suitable decisions during the course of different elections. Furthermore, staying informed of different news will lead to an increased awareness and consciousness of humanity and life. With this elevated awareness, we could try to promote peace and raise assistance for the people in need of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...areness, we could try to help struggled people in near or distant lands and promote pe...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...nts so we could make suitable decisions during the course of different elections. Furthermore, stayi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, thus, in general, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81797235023 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66551622508 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442396313364 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.0242141242 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5294117647 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52941176471 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158154412776 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613210241754 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402670912564 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10959695603 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352955884907 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.