TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

In a journey of life, people make numerous friends, some are long lasting whereas others fleeting. What kinds of friendship- having friend for long period or many friends only for certain time- make human happy? There is a fervor debate about it. Some believe having a large friend circle for limited time plays pivotal role for maintaining happiness, while other believe to it's having a long term relationship are significant for happiness in one's life. People should, In my opinion, have long term relationship with friends to become cheerful.

To begin with, the level of intimacy are higher with friends, to whom we have known for a long duration. We tell them all about all our weakness and strength, what we feel, and our sentiments. Telling to them all makes people feel happy as people feel that they have someone they can rely on, express everything that come in their mind, which may be bad or good. The crony will never tell his opinion to others and their life of friendship is essential for a person to become happy. I have a School friends, for instance, to whom I share everything and he does to, but we, nowadays, meet for only occasionally. However, meeting him makes me happy as I can share everything to him, things that have happened in his absence and I am sure that he will not tell anything about me to others. In other hand, we know large number of people while confronting various task, but we are to them so limited. We only do formal communication, discussion about the work and we don't bother to say any personal matter to them due to fear of revealing my secret.

The help provided my them may be another justifiable reason. Close friends help their mate in every circumstances and to be happy, we need a person to whom we can rely on at time of need, and close friends are such ideal helping people. If we make a numerous friends, they may not be willing to help us that may cause risk. They may not trust you to provide huge sum of money even though they have it. However, in close friendship it is quite opposite. They do everything possible to help their friends and also they risk for you. My brother, for example, gave ten thousand dollar to his close friend Hari with a promise that he will return to it after certain time. He was my brother childhood close friend. I knew that he had pleaded with other new friends, but everyone denied. Finally, he told my brother and he knew that my brother would not denied.

In conclusion, some may believe short term friendship is essential for satisfied life, but I do not. Long term friendship provides security, intimacy and help. Therefore, I insist everyone should focus for few intimate friends to raise life quality.

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Average: 6 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 445, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...onship are significant for happiness in ones life. People should, In my opinion, hav...
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Line 1, column 496, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...People should, In my opinion, have long term relationship with friends to become che...
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Line 3, column 963, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ation, discussion about the work and we dont bother to say any personal matter to th...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'friend'?
Suggestion: friend
...l helping people. If we make a numerous friends, they may not be willing to help us tha...
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Line 5, column 848, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'deny'
Suggestion: deny
...r and he knew that my brother would not denied. In conclusion, some may believe sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62993762994 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45413140778 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496881496881 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4270114726 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6538461538 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34615384615 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203413973262 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637184598082 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573483600977 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137068202622 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576592155868 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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