TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Friends represent an important role in everybody's life. Some people would argue that keeping friendship with limited number of people over a long time makes us happy, while other may believe that the ability to make new friends is more beneficial. In my opinion, It is better to have extended circles of new friends. I will explore the reasons for my stance in the following lines.

To begin with, being sociable and knowing new people widen you perspective and experience. Someone once said “ no man is island”, so humans is need friends as essential part of their lives. If you expanded your circle of friends, you will learn more form their different views and ideas about life. In other words, you information and expertise will be augmented depending the diversity and number of mates you meet in your life. For example, when you start a new job, it vital to build new connections inside your work. Not only would they enhance your understanding of your tasks, but also they will make you more comfortable of the work environment, especially if you are fresh graduate who do not own much experience. Gaining more friends is typical way of polishing your attitudes and expertise.

Furthermore, the ability to make new friends makes you satisfied and increase your self-esteem. If you knew that somebody is always present to assist you during hardships of life, that will make you more confident. Folks that you can rely on pave the way to more convenient life. My own personal experience is a compelling example of this. During my study in the university, I found great difficulty in comprehending some subjects and I became so depressed. However, when one of close colleagues knew about my problem, he volunteered to explain all the hard topics to me. I was very grateful for his generous offer. After a short period of time, I mastered these subjects. As a result, I passed my exams with flying colors.

In conclusion, the ability to acquire new friends is crucial for happiness. This is due to the fact that a wide range of people in your life will help you to broaden your attitudes and boost your confidence.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...l for his generous offer. After a short period of time, I mastered these subjects. As a result...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83879781421 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69041344861 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573770491803 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9907518294 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27875099438 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080350267872 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748084556036 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185740214402 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710553410541 0.0645574589148 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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