TPO31:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I believe that the world's speed of changing makes people have more comfortable life, so they are happier than the past. Technology, one of paramount element in rapid changing, enable mankind to overcome the difficulties which were insurmountable. Not only advanced technology but also medicine are so beneficial to make life more convenient and cheerful since the fast progress of medicine results in treating many fatal illnesses which were one of the most significant cause of sorrow and grief.
In comparison with the past, human now is more capable to produce new equipment to ease life. These tools sometimes exert a considerable influence over our lives. For instance, the internet, the masterpiece of 20th century, has revolutionized our way of communication. It takes us just few seconds to reach a person in the other country. However, it was too difficult to send a single message from town to town-they used pigeon or even smoke in the ancient times. For another example, consider the vehicles which were utilized in the past and today. Today’s means, like airplane and train, are faster, cheaper and more comfortable. In conclusion, in many areas technology prevails our tradition.
Since health is absolutely essential factor for being contented, if somebody in poor health, it made him/her mournful. For example some of contagious diseases like flu, fever and tuberculosis killed over the millions of children and adults. Not only did the patient suffered from it but also their family became miserable. However, these diseases have been diagnosed and cured recently. So that we have healthier life today than the past.
Nowadays technology has immense positive effect on our lives; we communicate more easily and travel faster. Additionally, in favor of rapid progression in medicine, one of the most important consequences of fast changing, people have more healthy life than before. Therefore, quick changing of life makes humankind happier than the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...ficant cause of sorrow and grief. In comparison with the past, human now is more capabl...
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Line 3, column 662, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'areas'' or 'area's'?
Suggestion: areas'; area's
...ore comfortable. In conclusion, in many areas technology prevails our tradition. S...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...vails our tradition. Since health is absolutely essential factor for being contented, if somebody...
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Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'suffer'?
Suggestion: suffer
...en and adults. Not only did the patient suffered from it but also their family became mi...
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Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...have been diagnosed and cured recently. So that we have healthier life today than the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34713375796 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8512079173 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630573248408 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8147700213 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3684210526 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5263157895 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126050181091 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373996524932 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470990104089 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748293604004 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201965515591 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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