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Both the reading and lecture are about the birds which cannot recognize the glass windows of buildings and then they try to pass from them, finally they can harm themselves in this way. The reading provides three reasons for solving this problem and then supports them. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article and finds all of arguments useless.
First of all, the author of reading declares that architects should apply one-way glasses instead of ordinary glasses. In this approach, settlers will be able to see out; however, since the birds will fail to see into glass; hence, they will perceive that glass is a solid obstacle and avoid flying it. This point is challenged by the lecturer and he points out that one-way glasses can get worse the condition because these types of glasses act such as mirror; consequently, the image of sky can reflect on the glasses, thus, the birds will fly toward the one-way glasses.
Secondly, the article contends that it should be better if colorful glasses are employed in the windows through some thin painted strips. Since there will be some free points that will not be covered by aforementioned strips; therefore, the light can enter house through these mentioned points and also birds never fly toward painted strips; in contrast, the professor expresses that surprisingly, the birds will think that those free openings which are not covered by the strips, are as holes, so they will attempt to pass from those small holes. On the other hand, this suggestion can provide negative circumstance for people who live in the house, because it can create a dark atmosphere.
Finally, the reading passage states that as we all know the birds have an organ which can feel Earth's magnetic field and based on this discern, they can migrate and find their way. In this way, the engineers would install the strong electromagnets on the buildings which send magnetic signals and they can steer birds to other sides. This argument is rebutted by the lecturer and he poses that the ability of sense of magnetic field for birds works in long distances such as leaving cold areas toward warm countries but in the short routes, the mentioned skill will not be effective, so this method is useless.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89033942559 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34148198504 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530026109661 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.5219683971 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.083333333 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9166666667 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.8333333333 5.45110844103 254% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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