At universities and colleges sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support

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At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Submitted by milad.hf on Sun, 06/12/2016 - 17:33

The argument above asserts that universities should consider equal budget for sports and social activities like classes and library. A simple recognition of the argument lends our discussion to a very significant questions of how many students prefer sports and social activities and how much money need to invest for sports and social activities in universities? Although It is broadly based argument which cannot summed up in a paragraph or so, we need look no further than the fact that students have a substantial role in our society. That having been considered, I however adhere to this belief that universities should consider equal financial budget for sports and social activities like classes and library for the reasons which will be illustrated at length in the subsequent paragraphs.

First and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that students should pay more attention to their health. Sport activities help students to enhance their body metabolic. Also Sport activities help students to prevent from getting sick. In simple terms, sport activities can improve student’s skill which help them in their studies. In addition, sport activities motivate students to study more and more. The best example that fit this notion is the excitement of sport matches which held between universities in each country. It can persuade students and give them food for thought. Therefore, it goes without saying that sports activities is the crucial factor for upbringing students and universities should consider enough financial budget for that.

Aside from sports activities which have many advantages for students, we cannot lose our sight on the fact that, students will become a part of society in the future. This means that students need more skills to communicate, find apt job opportunity and bring up a family. To put it in apposite words, some students who just attended classes and libraries may encounter serious problems. For the purpose of the illustration, lets take the example of student who goes for job interview needs special communication to obtain that position, ones will lose the job. The most critical factor can help students to improve communication skill is social activities in one’s university or college. Hence, as is clear social activities help students to enhance their skills.

Having considered all the aforementioned points discussed above, I aver that universities should pay more attention to sports and social activities and consider enough financial budget for that.

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Average: 9.3 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...udents to enhance their body metabolic. Also Sport activities help students to preve...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.287356321839 0.229887763892 125% => OK
Verbs: 0.144827586207 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0896551724138 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0344827586207 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0390804597701 0.0685040099705 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119540229885 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0229885057471 0.0351676179071 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77215507322 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0298850574713 0.0309702414327 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00459770114943 0.00188951952338 243% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0781609195402 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.032183908046 0.0209618222197 154% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0229885057471 0.0139019557991 165% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2536.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 400.0 408.028673835 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.34 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.425 0.338922669872 125% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.3 0.251872472559 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2225 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1425 0.112833075102 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77215507322 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485 0.524397521467 92% => OK
Word variations: 52.548173154 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0526315789 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1182961065 48.84282405 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.473684211 120.699889404 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.5533526081 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.526315789474 0.644075263715 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 51.0526315789 45.7405998639 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.96842105263 1.45489161554 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122534965293 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0753543152335 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.507169706841 0.497263757937 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162727080266 0.151897553556 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.401969476776 0.336927656856 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.12680403302 0.067059652881 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Although It is broadly based argument which cannot summed up
Although It is a broadly based argument which cannot be summed up

lets take the example of student who goes for job interview
let's take the example of a student who goes for a job interview

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.22 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.935 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5