We learn from our experience better than book.
Books are considered to be the best source of all knowledge, but not everything is learned contained in books. Some people believe that without reading books and put their information in practice, our learning would be much harder than we thought. In contrary, others disagree and think books these days can offer us sufficient valuable knowledge. As far as I am concerned, I would appreciate the fact that knowledge gained from a person's real life experience is much more crucial than that obtained from books resources. Several situations in our lives perhaps need real experience to understand such as learning how to drive, learning about different cultures and education.
First, in term of learning how to drive. No doubt, manuals and guides include essential theoretical nature of an idea and concepts which teach the person about traffic laws, road signs, and how to handle some natural obstacles such as how to drive in fog, snow and heavy raining. However, without putting yourself behind the wheels on the road. A person would never learn how to drive. Apparently, the more you drive, the more experience you obtained. Books have nothing to add to our experience.
Second, imagine youreself living in the USA and want to learn about China. You have two options: either purchase books about that country which teach you anything you need such as their language, their history, and their customs, which is the cheapest way of learning but long time learn. Or travel to live their for couple months which is more expensive but time-consuming. Which way do you think is better for you?. For me, I think each book presents its.' author's perspective. If you want to learn about other countries, you have to get up close to their population. Furthermore, the experience of dealing with native people teach you a lot about hidden things such as their idioms, their facial impressions with some situations. Without real interaction, your books play nothing in teaching.
Finally, even with education and whatever the subject is, it is mandatory for each school to put couple months of its students' graduation year into practice. They have to volunteer and interact with real work situations. For many, this way plays an evitable role for mastering the theoretical information and knowledge in real life. For example, I admit that it is impossible for me to study pharmacy and memorise all generic or brand names, also to differentiate between dosage forms, without practising in the store situation. I spent six hours daily trying to understand those tough subjects. Pharmacy books information harder to absorb without real experience with patients and medicine life.
All in all, books are like a guiding light in one's pursuit of knowledge. However, real life experience is the best teacher in man's life. Without the practical learning of driving, other countries and hard educational subjects, it is impossible to master the information in books.
Comments
For real?? You give me five
For real?? You give me five scores for those mistakes?? it is painful ???
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Second, imagine youreself living in the USA and want to learn about China.
Error: youreself Suggestion: yourself
Sentence: For many, this way plays an evitable role for mastering the theoretical information and knowledge in real life.
Error: evitable Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, I admit that it is impossible for me to study pharmacy and memorise all generic or brand names, also to differentiate between dosage forms, without practising in the store situation.
Error: practising Suggestion: practicing
Error: memorise Suggestion: memories
flaws:
The structure of the essay is not correct, so the e-grader gave you a low mark.
This is how you organize the essay:
para 1: introduction
para 2: example 1
para 3: example 2
para 4: example 3
para 5: conclusion
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while you will need to give reasons and arguments before examples. The correct pattern is:
Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree. (suppose we support side A)
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).
Para 3: Second, reason 2, blabla... do the same thing as First
Para 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. first,....second...However, there is no causation/relation... Still I support side A, ...first,....second...
Para 5: Conclusion.
An simple example (Eating at home or restaurant) for paragraph 2:
Para 2: First, reason 1 (1 sentence: Eating at home can save money) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences: I can prepare cheaper food from food market; I don't need to drive or take a bus to reach the restaurant; I don't need to pay tips...) + examples for reason 1 (around 1 sentence: for example, a sandwich can cost me $10 at restaurant, but it only cost me $5 at home.) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences: with the money I saved, I can buy a good book to read; I can use the money for a trip...).
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for this essay topic, you may give reasons like:
First, not everything that is learned is contained in books. People are different and the problem solving style is dependent on the perception of people, which is diverse from person to person. Experience is limited to our own but not from other people who wrote those books. for example: swimming or driving....
second, awareness from practical experience is more memorable and enjoyable. It helps to learn from attitudes and situations, how to handle difficult problems and conditions. To understand completely about anything, we need to experience them at our first hand. for example: learn Chinese culture...
Third, ....
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2403 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.948 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.536 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.462 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you I will write
Thank you I will write another paragraph in this way,hopefully I can beat the score.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 458, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Authors
...For me, I think each book presents its. authors perspective. If you want to learn about...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... all, books are like a guiding light in ones pursuit of knowledge. However, real lif...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'i think', 'no doubt', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239488117002 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.157221206581 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0932358318099 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0310786106033 0.046263068375 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0712979890311 0.0685040099705 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118829981718 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.036563071298 0.0351676179071 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67617100804 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0383912248629 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.0018281535649 0.00188951952338 97% => OK
Determiners: 0.0694698354662 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0073126142596 0.0209618222197 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0164533820841 0.0139019557991 118% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2950.0 2387.08602151 124% => OK
No of words: 484.0 408.028673835 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09504132231 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363636363636 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272727272727 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.206611570248 0.174417080927 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134297520661 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67617100804 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53305785124 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 63.7892318672 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 16.6896551724 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6322177352 48.84282405 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.724137931 120.699889404 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6896551724 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48275862069 0.644075263715 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.9623824451 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.52112676056 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106078092382 0.300154397459 35% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0893867839734 0.103427244359 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0791171631205 0.0752933317313 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.428634515768 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152306002587 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338194915398 0.114077575197 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431982743166 0.0781384742642 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308675803394 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0286842265851 0.067059652881 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0609258672657 0.210909579961 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459339233555 0.0618886996521 74% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.91756272401 264% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
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Rates: 51.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 15.5 Out of 30
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