A well-paid job with less time spending with family or lower-paying job with more time spending with family. Which do you prefer?

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A well-paid job with less time spending with family or lower-paying job with more time spending with family. Which do you prefer?

By and large, it is established beyond doubt that as human living in civilized societies, we all need a suitable job in order to flourish in our everyday lives and this concept has played a dominant role in individuals' way of living throughout history. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that people should have a well-paid job with less time spending with family whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. Due to the controversial nature of this question there is not a general agreement on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that people should make an efforts to have a well-paid job and enough time to spend with family. In the ensuing paragraphs some convincing reasons will be delineated to elaborate my personal stance.

To commence with, there is no doubt that human beings have been putting all their efforts in order to find a suitable job guaranteeing their future life but they should take their health into consideration. Generally phrased, although working and well-paid job could guarantee future life, it will create such serious health problem like severe stress, heart disease and so forth. Indeed, stress is of utmost important problems that could have deleterious effects on people's health. For instance, when people run their own business in order to make a living, they are always anxious and overwhelmed by stress due to the fact that earning a substantial amount of money is their whole life goal. To elucidate more on this issue, concentrate only on job not only will terminate in health problem and put people's health into danger but also will have negative influence on family relationship.

Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that relationships required work. They do not materialized and maintain themselves and they are not built on a foundation of convenience either. To put it in other word, when people just think of their career and do not allocate enough time to their family and friends, they will be away from them that resulted in deleterious effects on their relationship. Going into the depth, when we pay attention to each other, indeed, we breathe new life into each other. With frequent attention and affection people will feel satisfy and grow stronger.
However, what was alluded to above can't be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the countless merits it has, indisputably, make a living and earn a hoard of money is of utmost importance issue when it comes to inflation and economic recession. In fact, people need to make money in order to flourish in their lives and reach pinnacle of their days. Nonetheless, it does not make those preceding benefits pale.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that people should earn money and spend enough time with their relation equally. Having ignored these situation will put people into a huge problem and not provide an opportunity for people to reach success in their personal life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 600, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an effort' or simply 'efforts'?
Suggestion: an effort; efforts
... the conviction that people should make an efforts to have a well-paid job and enough time...
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Line 6, column 36, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...r. However, what was alluded to above cant be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alo...
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Line 8, column 141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'these situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; these situations
... their relation equally. Having ignored these situation will put people into a huge problem and...
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Line 8, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o reach success in their personal life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, well, whereas, for instance, in fact, no doubt, by and large, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03048780488 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68123483848 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508130081301 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5684866917 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.857142857 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226578662464 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071393691974 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109509916875 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133516073134 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949651767522 0.0645574589148 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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