Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.
When it comes to the issue the importance spending time with family and friends or work, some people believe that it would be proper for them to allocate much their time for their job. However, have the opposite view, and think that the aim of live is to be with your family. As far as I am concerned, the last point carries more weight. The main reason is that work for long hours decreases the employee’ efficiency, and also has negative consequences on his relationship with his family.
First and the most important reason is that working for long hours increase our working fault, which can affects our career future adversely. As we all know, the important purpose of working for long hours is that we can make more money, while increasing our mistake during the work can has destructive role on our business. The main reason of work for longs hours lead us to make many problems, which can be affective in our feature career. I think that a small example can give some light on this matter. In the developed Western Countries, schools do not allow their children to teach more than eight hours in a day. They know that a teacher can not have a effective teaching when he work for long hours. In addition, teachers not only should decrease the amount of teaching hours in standard norm, but also they have to make their vocation with families. As a result, teachers will fill with fresh energy to come back to the school.
A further point we must consider is that a job with long hours forces us to pay less time with our friends and family. Some think that gaining much money helps them to have access plenty of facilities, while they never be delighted without have strong bond with their family. I think that there is not a better instance than myself when I was working in the electronic company, which was near California. At that time, I liked to increase my family’s welfare as much as possible by putting plenty of facilities at their disposal. Hence, I almost worked all day long, even weekend, to gain the high salary, which needs for me to fulfill my dreams. Nevertheless, I had forgotten that one of my obligations in life is to spend enough time with my wife and son, and money can cover this duty. Because of less attention on my family, I had many disagreements with my wife, and unfortunately; he left me. So, we never compare the presence in family with money, which is important aim of work for long hours.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that if you want to have high performance and little problems with your relatives, you should spend much time with them. For achieve this, I think that a lower-paying job with shorter hours is a good selection. Last but not leas, I hope that people gain the deeper insight that the meaning of living is not to just make money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...s increase our working fault, which can affects our career future adversely. As we all ...
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Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... They know that a teacher can not have a effective teaching when he work for lon...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be never
...access plenty of facilities, while they never be delighted without have strong bond with...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'while', 'i think', 'in addition', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224778761062 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.145132743363 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0920353982301 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424778761062 0.046263068375 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0938053097345 0.0685040099705 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.138053097345 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0176991150442 0.0351676179071 50% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.45089005717 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0283185840708 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.070796460177 0.0887237588012 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0212389380531 0.0209618222197 101% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0141592920354 0.0139019557991 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2826.0 2387.08602151 118% => OK
No of words: 505.0 408.028673835 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59603960396 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.273267326733 0.338922669872 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.20396039604 0.251872472559 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.124752475248 0.174417080927 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0772277227723 0.112833075102 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45089005717 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487128712871 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.9260932959 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.9565217391 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1223751215 48.84282405 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.869565217 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9565217391 20.5533526081 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.521739130435 0.644075263715 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 42.3525613431 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.35220125786 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317052345346 0.300154397459 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10341710552 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0928266834326 0.0752933317313 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.4594602738 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.11922986495 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114024528836 0.114077575197 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879920714258 0.0781384742642 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.377028866457 0.336927656856 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0213740823524 0.067059652881 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23484054651 0.210909579961 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694395749447 0.0618886996521 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.86379928315 259% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 2.4623655914 406% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.