The widespread use of internet has given people access to information on a level never experienced before. How does this increase in availability of information influence life in today’s world.
Nowadays, all human kinds can sense influence of technology on quality of their life. When Grahm bell invented telephone maybe he wasn’t thinking that one day a new kind of invention, as we call it Internet, will enable people to connect each other through different kinds of ways such as email, video calls and etc. However, advantages of internet are not limited to connection of people, and providing access to a lot of information at any time and location is the most beneficial feature that have changed the life in today’s world. In the following essay, two influence of internet based information on the life of people have been explored.
To begin with, internet provides an easier way to access to newest academic information around the world. When you connect to internet you can easily find daily published scientific articles and use them in your projects or researches. For example, when I was working on my MSc thesis, access to some specific journals was crucial for me. The university that I have studied there got a large library, but when I checked its journal archive I couldn’t find interested journals. So I referred to website of those journals and acquired newest papers on my subject of interest. Finding reports of new works which have been done on my subject helped me to finish thesis as good as it possible. This example demonstrates how the internet helps researchers to access best and required references.
Secondly, internet motivate people to be socially active and helps them to make a better society. When people have access to internet, they can share their ideas and opinions via social networks. While in the past people might thought that they are alone in their idea. But now they can find a lot of like-minded people and share ideas. My friends experience demonstrate this concept. During the first year of my university studies, I had a roommate which was in the mood of Jazz music and he was wanting to promote it at university, but he was alone in his way, so he couldn’t make it. In the second year of university Facebook had been started to be popular social network around the world and my roommate gathered a lot of Jazz lovers in the university by making a JAZZ LOVERS group in Facebook. As a result of my friends and his friend’s activities, in the last year of university almost all of students were knowing about Jazz. This example shows that how social network helps people to share their ideas and spread them.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that internet is one of the most important inventions of human kind which accelerated development and also helped people to make a better life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87719298246 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71013950002 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517543859649 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5778118968 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.904761905 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217269293668 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069497020478 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630292422738 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133521307683 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061297407197 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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