You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Nowadays, people very often feel overwhelmed by the pace of the modern life. People are so busy and sometimes do not have time to rest and enjoy little moments in life, such as reading an interesting book. But the little things like that are crucial because they make us better. Therefore, If I had decided to improve my community, I would have volunteered in the library.
First of all, with the development of technology, libraries need support from the society. Today people prefer to use technologic devices to read. Therefore, fewer people visit the library at the time and its significance has been declining. But the library is a great place not just for reading, but for studying as well. It provides quite an environment for those, who need to concentrate. For example, when I was preparing for the TOEFL test, I was visiting my local library constantly, because only there I was able to concentrate and study effectively. To that end, helping to maintain the library`s environment could be beneficial for people, who are looking for a quiet place to read or study.
Secondly, the library is a great place to enhance intelligence for children and adults. For instance, the library in my community has a tremendous amount of books and magazines, which could be interesting for different groups of people. Moreover, the members of the library can always take the books they like home and do not spend money on purchasing them. This way, in order to improve my reading skills for the TOEFL test, I always take ~National Geographic~ magazine home for free. It helps me save money and, what is, more importantly, lets me advance in the reading section of the test.
To conclude, I strongly believe that volunteering in the local library could be beneficial for my community. This is because in the library people can find a silent place to read or study and improve their academic performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing for a quiet place to read or study. Secondly, the library is a great place t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79440837803 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6876746259 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0560478073534 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0212778633961 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0262504623746 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0427213626626 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284653129475 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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