You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business Which would you choose to buy Give specific reasons to explain your choice

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You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

Regarding the importance of being an entrepreneur to play a critical role in economy as well as recruit lots of young unemployed resources, I am strongly inclined to establish a business. Needless to say, the long-term vision to invest the money in the part that remarkably increase our capital investment and lots of people be beneficiary to the provided profits, cannot be compared to purchase a house for my comfortable. In addition, if a business be well-established, the annual profit is sufficient to purchase more than one house. Being a risky and going ahead along the associated excitement can be mentioned as other privileges of this issue. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned, the following analytical reasons and examples will be presented.

First and foremost, the importance of society development for next generations cannot be neglected. The economy is vital key in all societies and it is directly affected by the situation of small and huge businesses established in local and global areas. The countries recognized as global powers such as United States of America and China arrange lots of businesses. Their governments exceedingly think that the future success of their countries and next generations tightly associated in succeeding the businesses and it is well-accepted among all people to be productive in a society instead of consuming other people gains. There are lots of people in China whom live in the mediocre homes but manage huge businesses. The unemployment rate in these countries are so low that all people remarked as productive human resources. Therefore, the business establishment is priority category for them compared to a short term investment such as purchasing a house.

Another primary reason can be attributed to the profit provided in businesses that can be saved annually and be sufficient to purchase a house. Although it is critical to investigate the financial aspects of a business before establishment in details, being optimistic, for a good and appropriate business, the provided profits would be unbelievable. There are lots of stories about prosperous people such as Bill Gates the pioneer of Microsoft, Ma Yun the founder of Alibaba, Donald Trump, etc which their businesses had initiated in a simple and small room. Nowadays, they have recruited lots of ingenious people around the World and their properties and chase revenues are so vast that cannot be calculated accurately. If they initially thought to invest their money in buying a house, they would not be rich like all people can be seen today. As a result, the temporary benefit in buying a house cannot be compared to the massive profit of a business even if it accelerated after a long while.

To recapitulate, regarding the importance of be a useful member for our country as an entrepreneur and the noticeable profit that can be gain through a successful business establishment, I am unquestionably prefer to achieve that. It is critically worth noting, an exact investigation of country conditions particularly security, economy, tax rules, etc should be done before any fulfillment. It goes without saying, all businesses have their own risks and being aware of them is much more essential than thinking about how much profit will be achieved during the time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
...ness establishment, I am unquestionably prefer to achieve that. It is critically worth...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2768.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2030075188 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08119346681 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503759398496 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 895.5 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.124413593 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.80952381 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920645154824 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331374121857 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290679267793 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615231237043 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327202719962 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
...ness establishment, I am unquestionably prefer to achieve that. It is critically worth...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2768.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2030075188 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08119346681 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503759398496 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 895.5 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.124413593 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.80952381 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920645154824 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331374121857 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290679267793 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615231237043 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327202719962 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.