AsthmaAsthma is ussually seen as a condition whose symptoms can be adequately controlled with the right medicines. Researchers point out that it is an intermittent disorder,characterized by temporary bouts of inflammation of the airways,which lead to typ

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Asthma

Asthma is ussually seen as a condition whose symptoms can be adequately controlled with the right medicines. Researchers point out that it is an intermittent disorder,characterized by temporary bouts of inflammation of the airways,which lead to typical symptoms such as wheezing,coughing and shortness of breath;after each episode(often known as an attack),symptoms subside and the airways return to normal.

Asthmatics tend to be susceptible to certain triggers in the environment. These include but are not restricted to animal fur,pollen, cigarette smoke,house dust mites and perfumes. Attacks can also be brought on by exercise,emotional sters or a variety of other factors including respiratory infections such as the common cold.

During an episode of asthma, the bronchial tubes and the smaller tubes dividing off from these,known as bronchioles,become narrow or blocked and as a result air can't get in or out of the lungs easily. There are two basic causes behind bronchial narrowing: either the bronchi and bronchioles are squeezed by muscles wrapped arround them rather like elastic bands,or they become blocked by mucus and swelling inside the tubes themselves.When the bronchi are constricted ,the condition is called bronchoconstriction. Occasional squeezing of the bronchi is normal, but in asthma sufferers these muscles may react too sensitively to environmental triggers. It is also a normal function of the bronchial tubes to produce mucus and,in concert with tiny hairs called cilia, to trap inhaled irritants and remove them from the body,thus protecting the lungs. But some asthmatics produce an overabundance of mucus,and this results in blocked airways and consequent asthmatic symptoms.

Summarize the points made in the lecture you heard,explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading.

The passage given, has some holes in it's facts, and is thus open to debate. The passage suggests that, after an attack, the bronchi revert to its normal condition, until the next attack. But, evidence stated by the professor in the lecture tends to contradict this statement.

The professor says that, there is new research suggesting, that for some patients, after an asthmatic attack, their bronchi do revert to their normal state as expected, instead, remain permanently narrowed. This may be due to a term known as "remodelling". Remodelling occurs from to the scarring of the organ, due to repeated bouts of the attack that take place in an individual. Hence, we can safely say that "remodelling" is not just a consquence of the attack, but may also be the cause for it.

This is further evidenced in the research which was conducted on several young children. It depicts that many of these young children are not only susceptible to remodelling in childhood, but sometimes undergo remodelling even before birth! This occurs due to several reasons, such as the genetic make-up of a child, and even, the environmental factors that the child is exposed to before birth. Hence, the child is born, naturally prone to asthmatic attacks. From this, we can note that, "remodelling" is the fundamental cause of these attacks in humans.

Therefore, recent research has given us enough reason to doubt some of the claims in the passage given to us, which states that bronchial narrowing is temporary, and only takes place during an attack.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, may, so, therefore, thus, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 257.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12451361868 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23913543478 2.5805825403 126% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56420233463 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0057537318 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 7.06452816374 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0713716965028 0.272083759551 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289801047757 0.0996497079465 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0238989683537 0.0662205650399 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445017583114 0.162205337803 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223151513763 0.0443174109184 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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