Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The social atmosphere of world society has changed, and the huge advances of mankind in communication, transportation and information technologies have played a significant role in emergence of globalization. This new era of modernization, and broad facilities, have emphasized the role of celebrities. It should be noted that this huge impact is more prevailing among juveniles, and literally is managed by commercial sector for increasing consumerism culture.
Younger people more use modern media and aspects of new information technologies, so they would be more the target of the consumerism culture which is led by celebrities. Today, all young people use modern technologies to contact with each other. They use their personal computers, cellphones, and other electronic devices to follow world news and fashions, famous people are at the edge of their attention. For instance, new fashion styles which are offering by celebrities are always trending. We can assess this impact by looking at the desire of Chinese teenagers to make themselves same as western models, with blond hair, and as thin as size zero fashion models.
As younger people have less experience in their life, they are more susceptive to what celebrities and famous entertainers propagate. Nowadays, the main source of social behavior in young peoples is celebrities. In contrast, older people rely on their personal experiences. For example, for buying a shoes, older people attend to the efficiency and comfort of shoes and they buy them from companies which have satisfied them before. On the other hand, younger people will buy shoes which have been used by celebrities, and could make them more stylish among their friends.
The content of celebrities' massages are more related to younger people according to advertising purposes of companies and social leagues. One of the major strategies in advertising is to affect children and younger people by using celebrities. Companies put a huge investment to use to produce advertisements especially for them. For example, car companies use some famous drivers to introduce their product. While young people are fascinated by celebrities, they will convince, or in some cases, compel their family to buy car from that company rather than its quality.
There is a close relation between the consumerism culture and reinforcing the concept of introducing some people as celebrities. This is an implicit trick which is used by companies more and more. It provides vast profit for them but will degrade some moral implications in society and rescue younger people to be so superficial and pedantic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a shoe' or simply 'shoes'?
Suggestion: a shoe; shoes
...al experiences. For example, for buying a shoes, older people attend to the efficiency ...
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Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ies. Companies put a huge investment to use to produce advertisements especially fo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'in some cases', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266375545852 0.261695866417 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.144104803493 0.158904122519 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.115720524017 0.0723426182421 160% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0305676855895 0.0435111971325 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0480349344978 0.0277247811725 173% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124454148472 0.128828473217 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0436681222707 0.0370669169778 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99577683898 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.028384279476 0.0208969081088 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0655021834061 0.128158765124 51% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0152838427948 0.0158828679856 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0131004366812 0.0114777025283 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2631.0 1645.83664459 160% => OK
No of words: 413.0 271.125827815 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.37046004843 6.08160592843 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.04852973271 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.404358353511 0.374372842146 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297820823245 0.287516216867 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.215496368039 0.187439937562 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.169491525424 0.113142543107 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99577683898 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 145.348785872 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508474576271 0.539623497131 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.6028126491 53.8517498576 105% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0529801325 161% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6666666667 21.7502111507 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1893476311 49.3711431718 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 132.220823453 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 21.7502111507 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.47619047619 0.878197800319 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.39072847682 59% => OK
Readability: 49.4487489911 50.5018328374 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.95098039216 1.90840788429 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453834464649 0.549887131256 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13004371258 0.142949733639 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0813133215715 0.0787303798458 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.505349850428 0.631733273073 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108305010619 0.139662658121 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172586673165 0.266732575781 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842904403049 0.103435571967 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.353773602762 0.414875509568 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0443960213721 0.0530846634433 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301893584773 0.40443939384 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885355573621 0.0528353158467 168% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.26048565121 258% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.49668874172 172% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 9.0 3.1766004415 283% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.2958057395 155% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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