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The article here conveys that nature and nurture play part in developing the personality. The article here the research on identical and fraternal twins. But the professor refutes to the points mentioned in the article and gives examples explaining her point.

First, the article states that identical twins having identical generyic makeup display similar behavior and character straits. The professor refutes to this point by stating that as the twins have been brought up in the same environment like environment at home, school, and anywhere else. So this can be considered as an environment or nature part working in developing of their personality rather than the genetic part.

The professor added another example in the above concept. The identical twins are considered same part by parents, teachers, and many others. The professor accounted them as two same halves. And said that as from very beginning both the children are provided with same things like the same flavor of icecream, same dressing sense and much more like this. So from this professor concludes that due to the same behavior and providing same thing from beginning they have the similar personality and with this says that genetics has no part to play in developing the characteristics of twins.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... by parents, teachers, and many others. The professor accounted them as two same ha...
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Line 5, column 502, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...y have the similar personality and with this says that genetics has no part to play ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 206.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21359223301 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64548409675 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538834951456 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.2511591462 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6363636364 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7272727273 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.27272727273 7.06452816374 18% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 63.6247240618 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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