summarize the points made in the lecture ,being sure to explain how they cast a doubt on the specific theories in the reading passage. Franchise VS Independent Business

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summarize the points made in the lecture ,being sure to explain how they cast a doubt on the specific theories in the reading passage.

Franchise VS Independent Business

The professor said that doing the independent business or buying already developed independent business more benefited than buying the franchise. She provides the three reasons for her opinion.

Firstly, She mentioned that if you have frachise then you have to buy the goods from their contracted provider. However the goods prize is lower in the market than the provider. But this not the view if you have the independent business. She diretly refutes that the market price of the goods are costly than frachise goods provider.

Secondly, she said that, you have to pay some percetgae amout to franchise ower from your profit. Moreover you not get benefited from their advertisement because they only do the promo of their products. They are not showing you independent product if you have. It is better to have independent business beacuse it take the only 1/2 money to advertisement instead of paying to franchise from your profit. The professor also refuse that the franchise advertisement provides more benefit to the ower.

The finally she say that buying the already developed business instead of buying the frachise is more secure. Because their is twice chances of business success than the franchise. It is less risky option for independent business which are not mentioned by the reading passage. She also contradict that franchise is more secure option than independent business.

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doing the independent business or buying already developed independent business more benefited than buying the franchise.
doing the independent business or buying already developed independent business is more benefited than buying the franchise.

Moreover you not get benefited from their advertisement
Moreover you do not get benefited from their advertisement

beacuse it take the only 1/2 money to advertisement instead of paying to franchise from your profit.
because it takes only 1/2 money to advertisement instead of paying to franchise from your profit.

The professor also refuse that
The professor also refuses that

It is less risky option for independent business which are not mentioned by the reading passage.
It is a less risky option for independent business which is not mentioned by the reading passage.

She also contradict that franchise is more secure option than independent business.
She also contradicts that franchise is a more secure option than independent business.

The finally she say that
Finally she says that

Sentence: Firstly, She mentioned that if you have frachise then you have to buy the goods from their contracted provider.
Error: frachise Suggestion: franchise

Sentence: She diretly refutes that the market price of the goods are costly than frachise goods provider.
Error: frachise Suggestion: franchise
Error: diretly Suggestion: directly

Sentence: Secondly, she said that, you have to pay some percetgae amout to franchise ower from your profit.
Error: ower Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: amout Suggestion: amount
Error: percetgae Suggestion: percentage

Sentence: It is better to have independent business beacuse it take the only 1/2 money to advertisement instead of paying to franchise from your profit.
Error: beacuse Suggestion: because

Sentence: The professor also refuse that the franchise advertisement provides more benefit to the ower.
Error: ower Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: The finally she say that buying the already developed business instead of buying the frachise is more secure.
Error: frachise Suggestion: franchise

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 15 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 226 250
No. of Characters: 1145 1200
No. of Different Words: 102 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.877 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.066 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.604 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.358 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.2 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4

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