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In this set of material is discussed about the asthma condition. The listening refutes the reading passage owing to, it explains that narrowing is not a symptom of asthma, instead, narrow nowadays is known as a factor that cause all the asthma symptoms.

The reading passage point out the typical symptoms as re wheeze, cough, chest tightness, and shortness of breath.. Is mentioned that during the episodes, the bronchioles become smaller and the airways are blocked thus, as a consequence of this condition, the lungs cannot be filled with air. Apart from this, is known two narrow patterns during an asthmatic attack: the first one is when the muscles squeeze the bronchioles or bronchi, the condition is known as bronchoconstriction and the other one, is when the structures are blocked by mucus because is formed a barrier and close the airways.

Contrary to the beliefs in the passage, is said in the lecture that narrowing is not a result from asthma condition, in other words the narrowing is cause of asthma, besides, according to currently researches, is most accepted this theory. In addition, the lecture explains the fact that the narrowing can be persistent or not, in other hand, there area two possible causes such as, genetics and sensitively to environmental triggers.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...chest tightness, and shortness of breath.. Is mentioned that during the episodes, ...
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'first', 'so', 'thus', 'apart from', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in other words']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265560165975 0.261695866417 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.153526970954 0.158904122519 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0663900414938 0.0723426182421 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0414937759336 0.0435111971325 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00414937759336 0.0277247811725 15% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.120331950207 0.128828473217 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0497925311203 0.0370669169778 134% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84522343039 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0165975103734 0.0208969081088 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00414937759336 0.00154638098197 268% => OK
Determiners: 0.141078838174 0.128158765124 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00829875518672 0.0158828679856 52% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124481327801 0.0114777025283 108% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1294.0 1645.83664459 79% => OK
No of words: 212.0 271.125827815 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.10377358491 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 4.04852973271 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391509433962 0.374372842146 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.320754716981 0.287516216867 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.212264150943 0.187439937562 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13679245283 0.113142543107 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84522343039 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575471698113 0.539623497131 107% => OK
Word variations: 54.5614073491 53.8517498576 101% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0529801325 46% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 35.3333333333 21.7502111507 162% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.5544886645 49.3711431718 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 215.666666667 132.220823453 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3333333333 21.7502111507 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 0.878197800319 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 67.4088050314 50.5018328374 133% => OK
Elegance: 2.1875 1.90840788429 115% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518517168083 0.549887131256 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.288026292332 0.142949733639 201% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0496722160753 0.0787303798458 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.796239516156 0.631733273073 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.103181130322 0.139662658121 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.334953155974 0.266732575781 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467535012534 0.103435571967 45% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.44463054628 0.414875509568 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.00498016669311 0.0530846634433 9% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.414336801297 0.40443939384 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188515606295 0.0528353158467 36% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 1.0 3.49668874172 29% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 4.0 10.2958057395 39% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Not in a correct format.

The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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