TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

Both texts deal with the question whether or not the painting "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet" was painted by the most famous Dutch painter Rembrandt. The text clearly states, that many facts prove that it wasn't painted by Rembrandt himself, but just attributed to him because of its style. In the lecture however the professor gives proof why it is in fact a work of the famous Dutch painter.
The first contradicting fact are the clothes of the woman in the portrait. She is wearing a white linen cap which gives her the appearance of a simple servant, whereas the luxurious fur collar she also wears doesn't fit. In the lecture is said, that after a thorough research people found out that the fur collar was added to the painting about 100 years later in order to increase the value of the work-piece, because now it illustrated an aristocratic lady instead of a servant.
Another problem with the painting was the display of light and shadow. Rembrandt was known as a master of painting light and shadow, yet in contradiction to the article, the elements in the work don't fit together. But this problem could also be explained by now. By removing the additional fur collar one could see that the lady is wearing a simple light colored cloth, which reflects light into her face.
The third aspect which let people wonder about the origins of the painting was the fact, that the panel was made of several pieces of wood glued together instead of just one panel which was usual for works of Rembrandt. But the additional panels were also added later to enlarge the painting. by doing this the painting seemed to be more valuable.
Another interesting fact is, that the main panel is made from the same tree like another painting of Rembrandt, 'Self-portrait with a hat'.
In the end it is clear that this painting is indeed a work of the Dutch painter and it should be reintegrated in the catalog of Rembrandt's paintings.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
Both texts deal with the question whether or not the painting 'Portrait of a...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...y states, that many facts prove that it wasnt painted by Rembrandt himself, but just ...
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Line 2, column 208, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the luxurious fur collar she also wears doesnt fit. In the lecture is said, that after...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o the article, the elements in the work dont fit together. But this problem could al...
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Line 4, column 293, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...so added later to enlarge the painting. by doing this the painting seemed to be mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, third, whereas, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 10.4613686534 191% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 342.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7134502924 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54929177359 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505847953216 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 475.2 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3105098207 49.2860985944 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.466666667 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.09492273731 147% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.540675023081 0.272083759551 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174167059435 0.0996497079465 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993330564768 0.0662205650399 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276328189909 0.162205337803 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673617202951 0.0443174109184 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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