TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

The lecture revises the idea resented in the passage, that dinosaurs were indeed endotherms.

First of all, the lecture claims that the polar region where dinosaur fossils were discovered was much warmer when dinosaurs lived than that of today. It was warmer enough for animals that were not endotherms to live. When the polar region was cold, dinosaurs could migrate to warmer places or even hibernated, like what many modern retiles do. The passage states that only if dinosaurs were endotherms could they survive in such cold climate.

In addition, the lecture refutes that the legs underneath the body doesn’t necessarily mean dinosaurs were built to run. Their leg structure could support more weight, allowing them to be more large. Being large was an advantage for dinosaurs. The passage assumes that the position of legs in line with modern endotherms could suggest that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Finally, the lecture asserts that the growth rings in dinosaurs’ bones indicating that they were not growing or growing slowly during cooler periods. The growth pattern of dinosaurs that rapid growth, followed by no or slow growth and then rapid growth again was the pattern of animals that were not endotherms. Endotherms should maintain temperature all year around even when it is cold. The passage suggests that Haversian canals existed in dinosaurs’ bones allowed them to grow rapidly, which is the characteristic of endotherms.

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Average: 8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...inosaurs that rapid growth, followed by no or slow growth and then rapid growth ag...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, then, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1373.03311258 90% => OK
No of words: 230.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37391304348 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65187453763 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55652173913 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.450988412 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0769230769 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6923076923 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.514722239266 0.272083759551 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186988263569 0.0996497079465 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761606693108 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295482527409 0.162205337803 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709861013783 0.0443174109184 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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the legs underneath the body doesn’t necessarily mean
the position of the legs underneath the body doesn’t necessarily mean

the growth rings in dinosaurs’ bones indicating that they were not growing or growing slowly during cooler periods.
the growth rings in dinosaurs’ bones indicate that they were not growing or growing slowly during cooler periods.

flaws:
No. of Words: 231 250 //need more content in the introduction

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 231 250
No. of Characters: 1182 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.899 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.117 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.414 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.78 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4