TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The lecture and reading both discuss fossils. While the reading states that nowadays the business of the fossils become improved. Moreover, the business of fossil especially dana sore is very valuable for business markets and private possession. The lecture refutes this, saying that the negative aspect and the conclusion of selling fossils in markets greatly exaggerated and the benefits of commercial fossil greatly disadvantage.

First of all, the reading claims that it has a negative effect in public because people can see those fossils in the public place for interesting and unfortunately private business make it hard .However, the lecture argues that commercial fossil was available for a purchase and it was routinely displayed in the public place such as schools and libraries.

In addition, the reading makes the argument that scientist do not access of wealthy fossil because the process of selling and buying fossils was very expensive although universities tried to available this fossil. The lecture counters this point by stating as the reading idea, the process of losing fossils by scientists not realistic idea and the fossils were performing from testing and examination by the scientists.

Lastly, the reading passage argues that the business mans and people who had a company Detroit the fossils when they want to extract these fossils also damage many documents which represent how can behavior animals in the past such as dinasore .The lecture refutes this claim by pointing out that many fossils would simply undiscovered by Scientist of universities and other institutions and it is better for Scientist to more fossils discover even Scientific does not any data.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...cture and reading both discuss fossils. While the reading states that nowadays the bu...
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...ortunately private business make it hard .However, the lecture argues that commerc...
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Suggestion: However
...tunately private business make it hard .However, the lecture argues that commercial fos...
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...ior animals in the past such as dinasore .The lecture refutes this claim by pointi...
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...r animals in the past such as dinasore .The lecture refutes this claim by pointing ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'moreover', 'so', 'while', 'in addition', 'such as', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.280141843972 0.261695866417 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.141843971631 0.158904122519 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0886524822695 0.0723426182421 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0673758865248 0.0435111971325 155% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0177304964539 0.0277247811725 64% => OK
Prepositions: 0.13475177305 0.128828473217 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0390070921986 0.0370669169778 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67110790371 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0106382978723 0.0208969081088 51% => OK
Particles: 0.00354609929078 0.00154638098197 229% => OK
Determiners: 0.127659574468 0.128158765124 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0106382978723 0.0158828679856 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0177304964539 0.0114777025283 154% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1700.0 1645.83664459 103% => OK
No of words: 267.0 271.125827815 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3670411985 6.08160592843 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.04852973271 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.460674157303 0.374372842146 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.374531835206 0.287516216867 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.198501872659 0.187439937562 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12734082397 0.113142543107 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67110790371 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531835205993 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.1835660563 53.8517498576 97% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0529801325 61% => OK
Sentence length: 33.375 21.7502111507 153% => OK
Sentence length SD: 135.643835098 49.3711431718 275% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 212.5 132.220823453 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.375 21.7502111507 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 0.878197800319 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.39072847682 147% => OK
Readability: 70.8281835206 50.5018328374 140% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.90840788429 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.677149904546 0.549887131256 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.210015884135 0.142949733639 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0416473426876 0.0787303798458 53% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.770540158849 0.631733273073 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166151977669 0.139662658121 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.407111535491 0.266732575781 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764099941108 0.103435571967 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.409881344201 0.414875509568 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0474071704926 0.0530846634433 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.507380590676 0.40443939384 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461101856096 0.0528353158467 87% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.2958057395 78% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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