TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The lecture and reading both discuss important fossil sold to private ownership. The author believes that fossil should not sell to private sector because of public and government not sees the fossils. The lecturer casts doubt on the claim made in the reading. He thinks that some negative consequence of selling the fossil to private owners but advantages are outweigh to the disadvantage.
First of all, the author claims that public not see the fossils because private collector not shown the public. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that public gets the great benefits by private owners. Most of time, government presents fossil on the public sector, schools, and library but private collectors shown in own sector, so public enjoying the fossil.
Secondly, the reading passage states that scientists lose vital study and discoveries of the fossils because of buyer cannot gives scientist for research. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He suggests that scientist not lose important discoveries. Valuable fossil must come to the scientist because of nobody know the value of fossil. He elaborate on this by mentioning that private collector pass the fossils on the scientist for examine or identification, that time scientist can do their research on the fossils.
Finally, the author mentions that untrained and uninterested collectors are destroy the precious fossils. The lecturer, on the other hand, implies that scientists are not going every place before discoveries. It is unavoidable facts that many discovery found by local people. If, they not collect the fossils then, not find any valuable discoveries.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ic and government not sees the fossils. The lecturer casts doubt on the claim made ...
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Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...il to private owners but advantages are outweigh to the disadvantage. First of all, the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'destroyed'.
Suggestion: destroyed
...trained and uninterested collectors are destroy the precious fossils. The lecturer, on ...
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Line 4, column 238, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun discovery seems to be countable; consider using: 'many discoveries'.
Suggestion: many discoveries
...scoveries. It is unavoidable facts that many discovery found by local people. If, they not col...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 258.0 270.72406181 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36434108527 5.08290768461 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68308896764 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2708162848 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4117647059 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1764705882 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 7.06452816374 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477520636828 0.272083759551 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146001669771 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113213918747 0.0662205650399 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283005257502 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826057179364 0.0443174109184 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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