TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading passage discusses an interesting topic about the disadvantages of fossil's private trade, and provides intensive information with three main reasons for support. However, the lecture casts doubts on the claim considering it exaggerated and opposes to each reason of the reading passage.

First of all, the reading passage complains about the public interest will decline when private collectionists keep for themselves the fossils they acquired. On the other hand, the lecture refutes this idea explaining that privates collectionists could allow the distribution of the valuable fossils among libraries and schools through donations, that in other way, would be impossible to be exhibit in those institutions.

Secondly, the reading passage mentions that private collectors trend to keep the fossil out of the public and consequently, many important discoveries would be missed. Challenging this idea, the lecture sees as an advantage that many private collectionists can discovered objects, that in other way, would demand many years, or never to be uncovered.

Finally, the reading passages states that the commercial fossil collectors do not take the proper care of the fossils and important evidence is lost in their hands. On the contrary, the lecture explains that every fossils, before going to the market, need to be evaluated first by a scientists to provide its real values. Thus, nothing would be missed if a scientist analyse the object first.

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Average: 8.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 282, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a scientist' or simply 'scientists'?
Suggestion: a scientist; scientists
...e market, need to be evaluated first by a scientists to provide its real values. Thus, nothi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1252.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 227.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5154185022 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88262630893 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603524229075 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1912342831 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.111111111 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7777777778 7.06452816374 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358513139636 0.272083759551 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149379056986 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952983241365 0.0662205650399 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216365679416 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485628777804 0.0443174109184 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.8541721854 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.2367328918 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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