TPO-14 - Integrated Writing Task Every year, forest fires and severe stormscause a great deal of damage to forests in the northwestern United States. One way of dealing with the aftermath of these disasters is called salvage logging, which is the practice

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TPO-14 - Integrated Writing Task Every year, forest fires and severe stormscause a great deal of damage to forests in the northwestern United States. One way of dealing with the aftermath of these disasters is called salvage logging, which is the practice

The passage discusses that every year there are forest fires and severe storms that can cause damages to forests. So, for decreasing these damges there is a solution that calls salvage logging. The reading provids three reasons that states the benefint of this method. While the professor rejects all these three reasons by explaining that these reasons are not convincing at all.
First, the text claims that after a devastation fire, forests are full of dead trees. So, if we do not remove this trees there will insufficient empty spaces to grow new plants. Also, the decomposition process of dead trees needs a lot of time and these amount of time will prevent the new trees to grow because of lack of space, too. The professor explains this reason is not true, Also, she describes that the ground needs these nutritions to be fertile. By do not having nutrients, new plants cannot grow very wellin forests. As a result, the mentiones reason in the passage rejected by professor.
Second, the reading asserts that decaying wood in forest can be a suitable habitat for many insects that they are harmful to healthy trees. So, by removing these dead trees we can have a suitable atmosphere for other trees. However, the professor says that these trees are not the habitats just for harmful insects. Consequently, she explains that most ofthe time these trees are habitats for birds and other animals. So, removing these trees is not a wise action. Third the text argues that salvage logging has economic benefits and many factories depend upon the forests for prpducing their products. In contrast, the professor describes that there are small benefits of using these dead trees. Also, she contends that most of the time the jobs in these industries and companis are temporary. As you can see, removing dead trees because of these nonsense goals is not a good way.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hat states the benefint of this method. While the professor rejects all these three r...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n fire, forests are full of dead trees. So, if we do not remove this trees there will ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, third, well, while, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 22.412803532 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8927444795 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36392764849 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492113564669 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.401544486 49.2860985944 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6315789474 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4036929514 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125663003991 0.0996497079465 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796355502894 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257882361355 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864248202712 0.0443174109184 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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