TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The article states that as the consumers ignore commercial advertisements, the companies have started to hire people as buzzers to advertise their products and services and provides and says that these buzzers have generated a lot of controversy.However, the man explains that this idea is misleading and it is a wrong impression and refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading claims that in this way people they just hear what is just paid advertising and it will give incorrect information to people about the buzzed product. The man opposes this point by saying that it is wrong to think in this way because companies hire people who use their products and they think that it is great. He states that buzzers are not like actors that have to read lines in commercials.

Second, the author declares that as the buzzers pretend that they are just some private individuals, consumers listen to them less critically and this may harm the consumers. Nevertheless, the man contends that this is completely untrue. According to the man people who are buzzed always asked questions about the price, services and the length that the buzzers used the product and if the buzzer could not answer them, they will not buy the product.

Third, the article avers that using this method will bring harmful effect to social relationships. The man refutes this point by stating that this idea is really stupid because if the product of the company is not good enough, the company cannot hire buzzers. Based on the lecture the buzzed products are more trustful and people will buy them better.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ers have generated a lot of controversy.However, the man explains that this idea is mis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94795539033 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61642438042 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 145.348785872 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490706319703 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 394.2 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.4544847832 49.2860985944 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.1 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 21.698381199 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.06452816374 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389730435493 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161042467858 0.0996497079465 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100576215157 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248888071554 0.162205337803 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738491178031 0.0443174109184 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.7273730684 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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