TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

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TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

The reading states that the vessels found in Iraq were ancient electric batteries and can even produce a small electric current when filled with some liquids. The passage adds that it is improbable that the vessels were used as electric batteries in ancient times, and provides three reasons to support the claim. The professor, however, casts serious doubts on this issue and believes that none of these reasons are convincing enough to disregard the presence of the batteries in ancient time.
First, the reading passage posits that as there is no evidence that any metal wires were located near vessels, they could not be used as batteries. Meanwhile, the lecturer refutes this claim by saying that vessels were found by local people and there might be some extra things like wire around them. In fact, they might have found some extra stuff more than vessels, but since they are not specialists, they could have ignored these important pieces in the site or may throw them away.
Second, while the reading claims that vessels might have been used for holding scrolls of sacred texts like copper cylinders discovered in the ruins of Seleucia, the professor says that they could be first designed with the aim of holding scrolls. He comments that ancient people might have then found that if they add Iron and other necessary things, they may be able to produce electricity. Thus, the vessels could be used for one purpose, but another usage might have been found after a while.
Third, in contrast to the reading passage's statement which declares that since there were no devices to work with electricity, the vessels would have been entirely useless appliances, the lecturer disagrees and thinks differently. He believes that they might be used as a powerful tool to give people a wild shock when they touch it, and also they might use it as a magical power to heal people. Therefore, not only could these vessels stimulate the muscles to relieve stress but also they might have been considered as a practical tool for ancient doctors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...des three reasons to support the claim. The professor, however, casts serious doubt...
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...nce of the batteries in ancient time. First, the reading passage posits that a...
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...es in the site or may throw them away. Second, while the reading claims that ve...
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... might have been found after a while. Third, in contrast to the reading passag...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, while, in contrast, in fact, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92173913043 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28659830776 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.9349089616 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.5 110.228320801 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 21.698381199 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.483604716166 0.272083759551 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19181181439 0.0996497079465 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845548295309 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296669723769 0.162205337803 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298990557961 0.0443174109184 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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