TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

In this set of given material, the reading states that the copper cylinders that are found at the railway construction
site weren't use as batteries. On the other hand the listening material mentions that, the theories presented in the text are unconvincing.The lecturer provides certain arguments to back up his assumption.

First of all, the author argues that the copper cylinders found at the construction sight are with just metal rods in it. There is no evidence of any wires attached to the metal rods; so that it can be used as batteries. Also, they didn't find any wires in the dig during excavation However,the lecturer asserts that, the excavation was done by the local people during the construction of rail road. There weren't any trained archeologists consulted for this excavation. Thus, many important evidences such as wires might have been overlooked by the people.

Second, the passage suggests that, similar copper cylinders were found in the nearby excavation sight suggests that such cylinders were used to carry sacred texts, so these cylinders found at this construction site might have also been used for similar purpose.On the contrary the speaker posits that, although they were used as a storage for sacred text they might have discovered the another purpose of this
cylinder as batteries.

Finally, the it is mentioned in the writing that ancient people didn't have any device at that time; that can be operated with the use of batteries.The orator casts doubt on this above argument and states that, there are evidence that in ancient era the small battery current might have been used for healing purposes,similar to the modern medicine where electric currents are used by doctors to heal aches and pain.

To sum up, the lecturer disagrees with all the points made in passage and promotes that the cylinders found at excavation site have more purpose as device for generating current for treatment than just the storage of spiritual documents.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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In this set of given material, the readi...
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...at are found at the railway construction site werent use as batteries. On the oth...
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... that the copper cylinders found at the construction sight are with just metal rods in it. There i...
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...e discovered the another purpose of this cylinder as batteries. Finally, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, look, second, so, thus, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.01324503311 279% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 324.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1450617284 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66977092694 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 145.348785872 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493827160494 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 21.2450331126 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.573824089 49.2860985944 251% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.7 110.228320801 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4 21.698381199 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3 7.06452816374 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.09492273731 171% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353963333671 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1312987886 0.0996497079465 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849765605701 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166566689433 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822933881408 0.0443174109184 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.3589403974 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 53.8541721854 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.0289183223 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.498013245 141% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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