TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The article states that Robert E.peary had reached to the North Pole on april, 7, 1909 and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that there are no solid evidences that Peary did so and she refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading avers that the investigation results that done by National geographic Society supports the claim of Robert Peary reached the North Pole. The professor opposes this point by saying that this investigation is completely objectives. Because the committee members were, in fact, Pole’s friends, and also they helped me financially  for his trip. FInally,  she mentions that this investigation only took 2 days and not examined evidences fully, so this was biased and not trustworthy.

Second , the article posits that recent expedition support peary’s claim that he reached the Pole during 37 days only. A british explorer named Tom Avery had done this expedition. The professor, on the other hand, explains that there are two difference between Peay and Avery trips. For example, the slides that used in Avery trip were less weight because his food was transported on the plane. Moreover, the weather conditions was so favorable compared to the conditions during Peary’s trip. So, this speedy issue did not proof that Peary  reached The North Pole.

Third, the reading claims that there are photographs taken By Robert E. Peary clearly support his claim. This was done by measuring the surf’s position. The professor refutes this point by explaining these images do not proof this claim. She emphasizes that these photos was taken by old, primitive camera, which produce unfocused pictures. And, consequently, we cannot make any precise calculations. Another thing, these photographs are faded over time and became so unclear. She concludes this photographs are not so great evidence to consider Peary’s claim that he reached The North Pole.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nds, and also they helped me financially  for his trip. FInally,  she mentions tha...
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...d me financially  for his trip. FInally,  she mentions that this investigation onl...
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...as biased and not trustworthy. Second , the article posits that recent expediti...
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...is speedy issue did not proof that Peary  reached The North Pole. Third, the re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, third, another thing, for example, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 304.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44407894737 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90863470929 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569078947368 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7323179109 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.75 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06452816374 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439370319742 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1446332602 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133796339311 0.0662205650399 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297401741427 0.162205337803 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354581609149 0.0443174109184 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.68 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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