TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him

The article states that Robert E. Peary had reached the North Pole on April, 7, 1909 and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that there is solid evidence that proof Peary did this and she refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading claims that the investigation results of the committee assigned by National Geographic Society support Peary claims. The professor opposes this point by stating that this investigation was not completely objective. The members of the committee were actually Peary's friends and his financial supporters of his trip. In addition to, the investigation took only 2 days, which means it did not examined the evidences carefully. She concludes that the investigation was biased and not trustworthy.

Second, the article avers that a recent expedition provides support for Peary's claim that he reached the North Pole in 37 days only, such as a british explorer named Tom Avery did this expedition. The professor, on the other hand, demonstrates differences in Avery's trip and the one did by Peary. For example, the slides that used by Avery were less weight, because he was not transport his food supply, instead it was shipped by a plane. Another thing, the weather conditions during avery's trip was much more favorable than it was in Peary's trip. Therefore, the professor concludes this expedition do not support Peary's claim.

Third, the reading posits that there are photographs taken by Peary provides strong evidence his claim. The professor opposes this point by saying that these images do not proof his claim. She explains that the camera used to take these photos was so primitive and old. So the photos cannot be focused and we cannot calculate the surfs position. Moreover, the photos were faded over time, and consequently, they become useless. The professor concludes these photographs are so great evidence to consider Peary's claim that he reached The North Pole.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'examine'
Suggestion: examine
...ook only 2 days, which means it did not examined the evidences carefully. She concludes ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, another thing, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 317.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17981072555 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61104617371 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526813880126 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.23620309051 182% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4918851543 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4210526316 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 21.698381199 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44767797597 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139285556888 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140103337232 0.0662205650399 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28215388593 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581698908165 0.0443174109184 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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