TPO-29 - Integrated Writing TaskLarge numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive, t

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TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task

Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive, the environment of the North Slope was already inhospitable,especially during the winter when it experienced several months of total darkness. How did the dinosaurs survive the wintertime? Paleontologists have proposed that one of the most common North Slope dinosaurs, the elephant-sized edmontosaur (Edmontosaurus), survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions. Several arguments support the migration hypothesis.

First, the edmontosaur's diet supports the migration hypothesis.Edmontosaurs fed exclusively on plants. Since there would have been no plants growing during the cold and dark North Slope winter, it appears that the edmontosaur must have left for at least part of the year and migrated to more temperate zones to find food.

Second, many edmontosaur skeletons have been unearthed from the same site. This suggests that edmontosaurs lived in herd. Many modern-day migratory animals, such as caribou and buffalo, live and migrate in herds as well. Moving in herds helps animals coordinate their migration.The finding that edmonotsaurs lived in herds further supports the migration hypothesis.

Finally, edmonosaurs were physically capable of migrating long distances. To reach more hospitable regions, the edmontosaur had to migrate about 1,600 kilometers southward. To make such a journey, the edmontosaur needed to move at about five kilometers per hour for several weeks, which is certainly could do. These animals could run very fast, reaching speeds up to 45 kilometers per hour. It could have easily used its locomotive power to move to warmer climate during the harsh arctic.

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In this set of material, reading propose some hypothesis about the issue that how dinasours could survive in harsh conditions of Alaska's North Slope in winter? Lecturer replied these hypothesis by explanations which repudiate all of them.

First of all, although reading believe that edmontosaur's feed mostly from plants and vegetables and they migrated to southwards due to shortage of food in winter, the lecturer disagree with this idea by emphasizng that most of plants which were growth in summer dried at autumn and endmontosaurs could ate them. So, they didn't need to migrate because of food so that they accessed to reliable sources of food.

Second of all, reading claim that endmontosaurs moved to south because they usually lived in herd and moving in herds triggers them to migrate to places which were suitable and convenient. In contrast, the lecturer gave some evidences that contradict reading's assumptions. She stated that many animals live in herd and herds have a wide variety of advantages for them. For instance, Roosevelt Elk lives in herb because of hide itself from predators. So, the reason that provided by reading couldn't be true.

Finally, the reading state dinosaurs, edmonosaurs, were strong enough to move long distances constantly. To illustrate, they moved about 1,600 kilometers to reach their new habitat which need walking five kilometers per week for several weeks. In contrast, the lecturer rejected this idea by giving example of their children. She stated although mature edmonosaurs enabled to take a long distances for several weeks, juvenile edmonosaurs didn't so much powerful to cope with such tough situation. So, this hypothesis refused too.

In conclusion, based on arguments of the reading and the lecturer, it seems scientists should discover more to find new solutions to explain this question. Findings of extant researches indicated some explanations which all of them repudiated by the lecturer.

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Average: 8.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this hypothesis' or 'these hypotheses', 'these hypothesises'?
Suggestion: this hypothesis; these hypotheses; these hypothesises
...North Slope in winter? Lecturer replied these hypothesis by explanations which repudiate all of ...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the plants') or simply say ''most plants''.
Suggestion: most of the plants; most plants
...agree with this idea by emphasizng that most of plants which were growth in summer dried at au...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'eat'
Suggestion: eat
...dried at autumn and endmontosaurs could ate them. So, they didnt need to migrate be...
^^^
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... endmontosaurs could ate them. So, they didnt need to migrate because of food so that...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...So, the reason that provided by reading couldnt be true. Finally, the reading state...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 439, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...for several weeks, juvenile edmonosaurs didnt so much powerful to cope with such toug...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 30.3222958057 178% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34627831715 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7248114731 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 145.348785872 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4029975525 49.2860985944 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.25 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254891575092 0.272083759551 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707678712407 0.0996497079465 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062300199488 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126205537318 0.162205337803 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424230009651 0.0443174109184 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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