TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

The lecture and passage both discusses about the Greek strategy of burning mirror during the war. According to the author, Greek's did not built the burning mirror during the war and all the tales about that are merely myth. On the other hand, the lecturer consider the tales of burning mirror to be true and provides reasons to believe that burning mirror was used in wars during that time.

First of all, the author argues that Greek technology was not that advance to make a burning mirror from flat sheets of copper. However, the speaker points out that the scientists in the Greek army were very intelligent. They were well versed with geometry and could have known the method of making parabola from flat sheets of copper itself.

Secondly, The article avers that burning mirror method takes lot of time to burn the boats and to the moving boats. So, the method is not efficient and practical. This reason was refuted by the lecturer. He mentions that the boats that were used by Romans were using a sticky substance, which was highly flammable. It can set out fire within seconds and could spread quickly.

Finally, the technology of burning mirror was not at all progressive than that of the burning arrows. Whereas, the orator points out that the Greek strategy of using burning arrows was known to Roman army. They were fully prepared for the attacks by burning arrows and to set off the fire. On the contrary, in case of the burning mirror only rays were seen and were very deceiving. So, when the rays caused fire; they were very surprised. Thus, it was very effective than the burning arrows.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...According to the author, Greeks did not built the burning mirror during the war and a...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...essive than that of the burning arrows. Whereas, the orator points out that the Greek s...
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Line 7, column 194, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...egy of using burning arrows was known to Roman army. They were fully prepared for...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74377224199 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1383547736 2.5805825403 83% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501779359431 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0129470251 49.2860985944 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4117647059 110.228320801 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5294117647 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392939573059 0.272083759551 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134414195104 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678271098171 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241584905702 0.162205337803 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561349907778 0.0443174109184 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.3589403974 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 53.8541721854 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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