TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

Romans had attacked on Greek port city and Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror". In the reading, historians does not believe on the usage of the burning mirror and shows some doubts on the capability and feasibility of this weapon. Whereas, lecture gives positive explanations to reject the views mentioned in the reading.
Firstly, reading states that Greeks were not technically good and it was difficult for them to make several meter wide mirror in precise parabolic shape. Contrary to this opinion, lecture states that Greeks were not too bad in making burning mirror.It is not required to have a single sheet of copper to make weapon. They could have used dozens of sheets of copper and fixed themselves in such a way to get a parabolic shape.
Secondly, reading states that reflection from the mirror takes time to fire and it has been proved in a experiment with stable wood piece. While, lecture agreed with the results of the experiment but claimed that boats were not made of wood only. They put some sticky substance like pitch to make boat water proof and pitch catches fire so quickly that it can burn in a second and it can spread quickly to burn whole body.
Thirdly, paragraph claims that Greeks had flaming arrows which works similar to burner mirror. What is the special use of burning mirror if they had flaming arrows to fire. Contrary to this opinion, lecture states that Romans were familiar with flaming arrows and they could counter for this. Burning mirror was new ingenious weapon which ignited fire from an unobserved place. This was a surprise for the enemies and more effective to burn ships.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...mselves with an ingenious weapon called a 'burning mirror'. In the read...
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Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ability and feasibility of this weapon. Whereas, lecture gives positive explanations to...
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Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...re not too bad in making burning mirror.It is not required to have a single sheet ...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... time to fire and it has been proved in a experiment with stable wood piece. Whil...
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Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...ticky substance like pitch to make boat water proof and pitch catches fire so quickly that ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'whereas', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259615384615 0.261695866417 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.185897435897 0.158904122519 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0801282051282 0.0723426182421 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0480769230769 0.0435111971325 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0352564102564 0.0277247811725 127% => OK
Prepositions: 0.115384615385 0.128828473217 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0544871794872 0.0370669169778 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.39950515215 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0416666666667 0.0208969081088 199% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0865384615385 0.128158765124 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0128205128205 0.0158828679856 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0128205128205 0.0114777025283 112% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1673.0 1645.83664459 102% => OK
No of words: 284.0 271.125827815 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89084507042 6.08160592843 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04852973271 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390845070423 0.374372842146 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239436619718 0.287516216867 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137323943662 0.187439937562 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0845070422535 0.113142543107 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39950515215 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535211267606 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 53.8248918549 53.8517498576 100% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.2857142857 21.7502111507 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5370275727 49.3711431718 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 132.220823453 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 21.7502111507 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.785714285714 0.878197800319 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.39072847682 147% => OK
Readability: 44.2293762575 50.5018328374 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.59523809524 1.90840788429 84% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.615404931476 0.549887131256 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132322479003 0.142949733639 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0911828904985 0.0787303798458 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.54842149522 0.631733273073 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.116267527288 0.139662658121 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.241082373219 0.266732575781 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887758300782 0.103435571967 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.256448590558 0.414875509568 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0401580990013 0.0530846634433 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.405539063061 0.40443939384 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736979827937 0.0528353158467 139% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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