TPO 32 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading states that sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the north Atlantic and Arctic Ocean would sporadically hear odd sounds starting in the 1960s until the 1980s. These strange sounds reminded them of frog croaks. That is why they called them "quackers". The sources of these sounds seemed to be moving very quickly. However, the submarines' sonar could not be able to detect any moving object in that area. There are a number of theories about what might have caused these odd sounds. So, the reading provides three reasons of support with regard to these theories. However, the professor in the lecture explains that these sounds are like strange phenomena and refutes each of the author's reasons as follows.
First, the reading claims that the sources might be the calls of male and female Ocra whales during courtship rituals. The professor, however, rejects this point by saying that this claim seems plausible at first but, it turns out to be highly unlikely. She affirms that these kinds of whales actually live near surface whereas submarines float deeply in oceans. So, it is unlikely that these machines could have heard their sounds.
Second, the article posits that giant squids seem to be the causes of the sounds. The professor, however, refutes this point explaining that these animals seem to be better candidates in comparison to others. But, considering the fact that giant squids always live there in Oceans, as these sounds first were heard in the 1960s and reported for decades till the 1980s when suddenly they became disappeared, we cannot conclude that these sounds are because of those animals.
Finally, the reading states that maybe military technologies are the sources of these sounds. To put it another way, it is likely that other countries' submarines might have been floating in the Oceans secretly and that is why Russians have been hearing them for decades. The professor refutes this point by saying that given that the sources of these sounds change their directions very quickly, due to the fact that submarines cannot change their directions very fast, this claim does not lead us to the conclusion that military technologies are the possible causes of them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
...to be moving very quickly. However, the submarines sonar could not be able to detect any m...
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Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... secretly and that is why Russians have been hearing them for decades. The professor refutes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, however, may, second, so, whereas, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 22.412803532 236% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 364.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11263736264 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45081276612 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505494505495 0.540411800872 94% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3207079574 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.388888889 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 7.06452816374 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398096391554 0.272083759551 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121885474383 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696531258702 0.0662205650399 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234298361044 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086606795679 0.0443174109184 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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