TPO 40
In this set of material, the article and the lecture disagree on the merit of landing possibility on Venus planet. The reading passage states that based on the conditions of the Venus such as the high atmospheric pressure, no water in it and insufficient sunlight which is necessary to generate the power of space crafts machines, this planet is inhospitable for our population. In contrary, the professor in the lecture challenges those theories and believes that it is nothing impossible for the scientists to solve. Following are a brief explanation of the listening passage's perspective.
First of all, the writer in the passage asserts that the atmospheric pressure of venus's surface is remarkably higher than our planet which is the main reason behind crashing most of the spaceships before landing. However, the lecturer casts doubt this point; he says that scientists can overcome this problem and conquer the higher pressure of venus's landing surface via creating a spacecraft machine station capable of floating in the atmosphere which makes the pressure in the high mimic to the Earth's atmospheric pressure. Consequently, people can reach that planet safely.
Secondly, the author claims that this planet is rich with nitrogen, sulfuric acid, and carbon dioxide gasses but it lacks water, the essential part of living things; therefore, it is very hard to bring life there. Nevertheless, the professor in the lecturer refutes this issue, too. He suggests that human can use those molecules to produce water without any necessary to import any basic chemicals from the Earth there. So, it is very easy to create water in Venus.
Last but not the least, the article argues that the thick clouds of Venus's climate cause reflection of most of the sunlight away from the planet. And, most of the rocketships need solar energy to operate and generate power; therefore, this makes landing or even reaching its surface determinative. While the professor rebuffs this argument of the passage, he thinks scientists can overcome this problem by using both reflective light from the clouds and the remaining passing lights to generate the electricity of the spaceships which solves the problem.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 354 250
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 354 250
No. of Characters: 1806 1200
No. of Different Words: 186 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.102 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.626 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.057 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269230769231 0.261695866417 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.130769230769 0.158904122519 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0846153846154 0.0723426182421 117% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0435897435897 0.0435111971325 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0282051282051 0.0277247811725 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125641025641 0.128828473217 98% => OK
Participles: 0.025641025641 0.0370669169778 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6977282811 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0230769230769 0.0208969081088 110% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.151282051282 0.128158765124 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102564102564 0.0158828679856 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0128205128205 0.0114777025283 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2193.0 1645.83664459 133% => OK
No of words: 354.0 271.125827815 131% => OK
Chars per words: 6.19491525424 6.08160592843 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.04852973271 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.415254237288 0.374372842146 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.302259887006 0.287516216867 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209039548023 0.187439937562 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132768361582 0.113142543107 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6977282811 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539548022599 0.539623497131 100% => OK
Word variations: 58.7161298691 53.8517498576 109% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.2857142857 21.7502111507 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.5403055462 49.3711431718 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.642857143 132.220823453 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 21.7502111507 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.878197800319 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.39072847682 0% => OK
Readability: 55.5117029863 50.5018328374 110% => OK
Elegance: 2.07594936709 1.90840788429 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.65479598027 0.549887131256 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124201598167 0.142949733639 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.111465305143 0.0787303798458 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.620562484025 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.206086514847 0.139662658121 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.311204302744 0.266732575781 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133385108512 0.103435571967 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.437548761454 0.414875509568 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.129028759419 0.0530846634433 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.496042660208 0.40443939384 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624407247269 0.0528353158467 118% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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