TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The lecturer talks about life on Venus considerable by using floating balloon, this balloon 15 km meter above the Venus surface. He presents specific solution for each problem of the article.
First of all, the author states that Venus surface has 90 times greater atmospheric pressure than earth. This severe pressure caused crushes spacecraft, human and anything. However, the professor suggest that floating balloon lies 15 kilo meter far away from Venus surface, as result of effect of Venus atmospheric pressure on station is same like earth atmospheric pressure.
Secondly, the reading implies that no pool of water and oxygen which are fundamental require for human. Oxygen and water bring on earth to Venus is impractical solution. The lecturer, on the other hand, mentions that Venus surface and atmosphere consist of gases such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid which can uses for produce oxygen and water. So, chemical material of Venus help to overcome the problem and not need to bought resource from earth.
Finally, the article emphasizes that thick cloud of carbon dioxide interfere to prevent light to reaches on Venus surface. The light is primary source for use of solar power cell which is assist contributes electricity. The speaker, in contrast, says that since 15 kilometer distance between Venus and floating station, carbon cloud cannot interrupt on station getting the light. Station first gathering sunlight and it can uses for generating power.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'meter' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'meters'.
Suggestion: meters
...gest that floating balloon lies 15 kilo meter far away from Venus surface, as result ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...bon dioxide and sulfuric acid which can uses for produce oxygen and water. So, chemi...
^^^^
Line 4, column 424, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...ion first gathering sunlight and it can uses for generating power.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 22.412803532 45% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1245.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 235.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29787234043 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4768223922 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612765957447 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9671678703 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7692307692 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38902401844 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139343876825 0.0996497079465 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611361085483 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224969326006 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060019223554 0.0443174109184 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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