TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

In this passage, the author thinks it is impossible to maintain a human presence on Venus for three reasons, however, all these are opposed by the speaker who points out these challenges can be possibly overcame by not establishing a station on the surface but on the 50 km above the surface like a balloon.

To begin with, according to the author, the atmospheric pressure is far greater than the earth's. But with the method to build a station 50 km above the surface, it can be easily solved because the pressure is equal to the earth's.

Then the passage points out that people have to supply oxygen and water from earth which makes it impractical which is also disagreed by the speaker. He then states that the Venus' atmosphere contains some chemical materials such as carbon dioxide and sulfuric that can be used to produce water and oxygen. We don't need to carry these thus it is not a hard challenge.

Moreover, with little sunlight on the Venus' surface, humans could not get enough electricity to use as power by the author. On the contrary, the professor mentions that since the station will be floating 50 km above the surface where the atmosphere is not thick, there will be enough sunlight to make power. What's more, people can use both the direct sunlight and the reflect ones.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...be used to produce water and oxygen. We dont need to carry these thus it is not a ha...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
... will be enough sunlight to make power. Whats more, people can use both the direct su...
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Line 7, column 365, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...le can use both the direct sunlight and the reflect ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, so, then, thus, such as, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70614035088 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42087384923 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565789473684 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.2708051378 49.2860985944 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.222222222 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.44444444444 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307059329216 0.272083759551 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118448975734 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656805794794 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170078124159 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474424990947 0.0443174109184 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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