TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

In this set of material, both, the reading passages and lectures are discussing specific challenges to set a permanent station in Venus. Nevertheless, the listening and reading passages are completely contradictory. Whereas the reading passage put forwards the view is not possible to built a station in Venus. The lecture argued all the possible solutions and ample support to validate its claim.

The reading cast doubt on the information in the lecture due to the fact, it is impossible the human presence in this planet, the environment is inhospitable for living. Firstly, findings lend to support to the claim the atmospheric pressure at Venus is greater than Earth, under this conditions the humans are not able to survive. Second, the chemicals element at Venus’s atmosphere are lack of oxygen or water vapor, for that reasons will be necessary to supply oxygen to generate adequate live conditions; but this solution is difficult to achieve. Finally, due to dense clouds blocks the sunlight it is no possible to produce energy.

However, the lecture develops the claim and present argument to support the possibility to set a permanent station. Firstly, the atmosphere pressure can be solved if the station is building fifty kilometers up from the surface; in this altitude the atmosphere condition is similar like the Earth, the same pressure. Secondly, even though the light is blocking by the clouds, these challenge is not a big deal, since, a consider quantity of light go through it and also a little percentage is reflexed, in sum, these is enough to satisfy the requirement of solar energy.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... passages are completely contradictory. Whereas the reading passage put forwards the vi...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e at Venus is greater than Earth, under this conditions the humans are not able to s...
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Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'chemicals'' or 'chemical's'?
Suggestion: chemicals'; chemical's
...ns are not able to survive. Second, the chemicals element at Venus's atmosphere are ...
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Line 6, column 418, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ese challenge is not a big deal, since, a consider quantity of light go through it and als...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 12.0772626932 8% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 263.0 270.72406181 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22433460076 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84909385607 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574144486692 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8420476759 49.2860985944 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.909090909 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 21.698381199 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27227320218 0.272083759551 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897964999168 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617036780907 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17062990276 0.162205337803 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755990061396 0.0443174109184 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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