TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The article states that the presence of the human on Mars is imoissuble and provides three reasons to support it. However, the professor explains that it is true that the maintainance of human on Mars would be challenging but it is possible. He states that if they establish a station which would be flooding about fifty kilometer above the surface of Mars they can maintan there. The professor opposes each of the reasons that is presented by the author.

First, the reading claims that the atmospheric pressure at Venus's surface is at least ninty times greater of the Earth's surface pressure. The professor refutes this point by explaining that by establishing the station in the height of fifty kilometer, the present pressure in the station would be equal to the Earth's surface pressure.

Second, the article declares that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus and the water and oxygen have to be supplied to Venus. Nevertheless, the professor contends that carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid exist on the atmosphere of Venus which can be used to produce oxygen and water. According to the professor, people can use chemical materical to obtain water and oxygen from the planet's atmosphere. Therefore, it is not necessary to supply them from Earth.

Third, the author avers that because most of the sunlight that hits Venus is reflected into the space and also thick dense layer of carbon dioxide exist on the planet, a little sunlight reaches to the surface of this planet. The professor opposes this point by saying that as the station would be above this clouds, the station can use the sunlight which would reach to that directly from above the station and also it can use the reflected light from below it.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 322, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...ion which would be flooding about fifty kilometer above the surface of Mars they can main...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 242, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...hing the station in the height of fifty kilometer, the present pressure in the station wo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 35, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no reservoirs'?
Suggestion: there are no reservoirs
...e. Second, the article declares that there is no reservoirs of water on Venus and the water and oxy...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 384, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'planets'' or 'planet's'?
Suggestion: planets'; planet's
...cal to obtain water and oxygen from the planets atmosphere. Therefore, it is not necess...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 304, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ying that as the station would be above this clouds, the station can use the sunligh...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, third, at least, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 293.0 270.72406181 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8976109215 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47264383761 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464163822526 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9371949784 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.583333333 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415817708179 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146471686502 0.0996497079465 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831410903782 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236342029596 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749957800351 0.0443174109184 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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