TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

In the lecture the speaker explains why no one of the solutions presented in the reading serve as explanation for why businesses should use different kinds of class to prevent injuries to birds. The three reasons why the speaker refutes the points made in the passage will be explained below.

First of all, the professor asserts that replacing the clear class with one way class will not help the birds. In fact, even the one way class has a problem because birds are outside and the one way class surface will make reflection as a mirror so birds will not understand the mirrors. This point directly refutes the point from the passage, which stated that this replacement will help birds because they can not see through a window so they will think that this window is a solid barrier.

Second, the speaker avers that painting the class will have a problem too. He says the designers while using the thin stripes painted over the class, they should make the openings space very small so the birds will not see the large openings space and fly through it. However , if the designers make that the buildings will be so dark. Again, this contradicts what is stated in the reading, which is painting the glass with color will help birds to avoid trying to fly through the glass.

Finally, the professor affirms that creating an artificial magnetic will not work. He explains that birds use the navigate to travel for along distance such as from the cold area to warm area before winter coming not for a short distance. Moreover, he says the birds use their eyes and the light during travel for a short distance. So this point disputes the point from the passage as well, because the passage argues that by saying magnetic signals help birds to fly away from the building.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ns why no one of the solutions presented in the reading serve as explanation for ...
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... the one way class has a problem because birds are outside and the one way class ...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...h stated that this replacement will help birds because they can not see through a...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ave a problem too. He says the designers while using the thin stripes painted ove...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...enings space and fly through it. However , if the designers make that the building...
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Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...magnetic will not work. He explains that birds use the navigate to travel for alo...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...l not work. He explains that birds use the navigate to travel for along distance such as fr...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...d area to warm area before winter coming not for a short distance. Moreover, he s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, in fact, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 312.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69551282051 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1920006491 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480769230769 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0502695348 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.692307692 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406593346128 0.272083759551 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137615559834 0.0996497079465 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848977000952 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223761169946 0.162205337803 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107933409029 0.0443174109184 244% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 53.8541721854 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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