TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

We all know that glass are dangerous for birds, the reading passage explores several solutions to prevent injuries to birds, the professor's lecture deals with the same topic, however, he thinks that all of those solutions can not effective solves this problem, which contradicts what the reading states, and he uses three specific reasons to support his view.

First, even though the reading passage suggests that replacing regular glass with one-way glass is a solution to this issue, since birds can not see in through a window and they will not try to fly through it, the professor argues in the lecture that birds will recognise one-way glass as mirror, and because birds don't understand the difference between a mirror and a glass, so that birds will still try to fly through it and thus hurt themselves.

Moreover, contrary to the statement in the reading that painting colorful lines on regular glass can be another solution, the professor contends that this statement is unreasonable, then he support his point with the fact that birds will think the painted stripes are holes, which means birds are tend to fly through them. Furthermore, if unpainted area is small, the inside of building will be very dark. Obviously, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart.

Finally, the professor asserts that artificial magnetic will not work to protect birds, whereas the author of the reading claims that magnetic signals are able to make birds away from the building with powerful electromagnets. The professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that birds use magnetic fields to navigate only when they travel in a long distance, in other words, this ability is not used when they travel between a city, so that create an artificial magnetic in the buildings will not help.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...-way glass as mirror, and because birds dont understand the difference between a mir...
^^^^
Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...tripes are holes, which means birds are tend to fly through them. Furthermore, if un...
^^^^
Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...lding will be very dark. Obviously, the professors argument disproves its counterpart. ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'whereas', 'in other words']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22256097561 0.261695866417 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.158536585366 0.158904122519 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0823170731707 0.0723426182421 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0548780487805 0.0435111971325 126% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0426829268293 0.0277247811725 154% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128048780488 0.128828473217 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0121951219512 0.0370669169778 33% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.54182614286 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0335365853659 0.0208969081088 160% => OK
Particles: 0.0030487804878 0.00154638098197 197% => OK
Determiners: 0.118902439024 0.128158765124 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030487804878 0.0158828679856 192% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015243902439 0.0114777025283 133% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1810.0 1645.83664459 110% => OK
No of words: 298.0 271.125827815 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07382550336 6.08160592843 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.379194630872 0.374372842146 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.298657718121 0.287516216867 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181208053691 0.187439937562 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107382550336 0.113142543107 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54182614286 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543624161074 0.539623497131 101% => OK
Word variations: 56.0521893592 53.8517498576 104% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 42.5714285714 21.7502111507 196% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 132.400752202 49.3711431718 268% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 258.571428571 132.220823453 196% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.5714285714 21.7502111507 196% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.71428571429 0.878197800319 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 72.4372003835 50.5018328374 143% => OK
Elegance: 1.41666666667 1.90840788429 74% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.699944936868 0.549887131256 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.170041796614 0.142949733639 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.115224610369 0.0787303798458 146% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.741080733169 0.631733273073 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.244234419004 0.139662658121 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.355344736063 0.266732575781 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164543102111 0.103435571967 159% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.366880088736 0.414875509568 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0360556046172 0.0530846634433 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.484431274781 0.40443939384 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854738125843 0.0528353158467 162% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 6.0 10.2958057395 58% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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