TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

In the lecture, the professor discusses why using digital medical records to replace paper records are not as promising as presented in the reading.

To begin with, the reading passage claims that by deploying electronic medical records, the cost of storing, copying and transporting paper-based medical records can be eliminated, which is more economic. Nonetheless, the speaker refutes this by saying that although many doctors are using electronic medical records now, they still preserve the paper form of records for certain reasons. Hence, electronic medical records are not that cost-effective.

Next, contrary to the second reason in the reading that electronic medical records are less vulnerable to errors, the lecturer points out that doctors tend to use pen and paper when meeting patients and the paper records are subsequently typed into the database, during which mistakes are likely to occur due to unrecognizable hand writing and poor organization.

Finally, the instructor rules out the possibility of easier research using digital medical records. It is not the handling of data, as the speaker states, but the privacy law to protect patients that impede researchers from free access to medical records. Despite the ability to save huge amounts of records, databases are still not open to scientists.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, nonetheless, second, so, still, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1124.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 205.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48292682927 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78154023728 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580487804878 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.1449044695 49.2860985944 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.625 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.576616921732 0.272083759551 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.253801101446 0.0996497079465 255% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108173139525 0.0662205650399 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322920218379 0.162205337803 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107601035767 0.0443174109184 243% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.3589403974 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.8541721854 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.2367328918 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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