TPO 49 - Integrated writing

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TPO 49 - Integrated writing

According to the reading, humpback whales migrate long distances with the help of stars like human sailors navigate their direction with stars, and provide some reasons to support the idea. However, the professor considers all of the claims presented in the reading unconvincing, and refutes all of them.

First, the passage claims that the brain of humpback whales have a complex structure that allows them to be so intelligent to use stars orientation to travel long distances. In contrast to this, the speaker indicates that intelligence is not related to the process of using stars for navigation because other animals are capable of using this method while they have an average intelligence like ducks.

Second, the writing writes that the fact that humpback whales travel in straight lines without using external objects, forces, or landmarks makes them dependent on using stars to direct their path. In contrary to this point, the lecturer points that it's possible to not to use landmark for guidance and stil be able to move with the means of earth magnatic field. humpback whales have a magnatic material in their mind that allows them to feel earth's magnatic field, and use it for finding direction.

Third, the article declares that sometimes humpback whales bring their head out of water surface and look upward in order to analyze stars which is called spy-hopping. The professor, however, asserts that spy-hopping can't exclusively be used for looking at stars because we can find examples of other animals that do it while they don't migrate. besides that, sometimes humpback whales do spy-hopping in day light which there are not any sign of stars in sky.

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Average: 7.4 (6 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... idea. However, the professor considers all of the claims presented in the reading unconvi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'average intelligence'.
Suggestion: average intelligence
...le of using this method while they have an average intelligence like ducks. Second, the writing wri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Humpback
...with the means of earth magnatic field. humpback whales have a magnatic material in thei...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ssor, however, asserts that spy-hopping cant exclusively be used for looking at star...
^^^^
Line 7, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... of other animals that do it while they dont migrate. besides that, sometimes humpba...
^^^^
Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...als that do it while they dont migrate. besides that, sometimes humpback whales do spy-...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, look, second, so, third, while, in contrast, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 275.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11272727273 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49796214464 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570909090909 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 419.366225166 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3134084579 49.2860985944 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.6 110.228320801 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06452816374 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0245015283981 0.272083759551 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0108089114591 0.0996497079465 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324267343772 0.0662205650399 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0137948409771 0.162205337803 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238933654547 0.0443174109184 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.3589403974 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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it's possible to not to use landmark for guidance
it's possible not to use landmarks for guidance

Sentence: In contrary to this point, the lecturer points that it's possible to not to use landmark for guidance and stil be able to move with the means of earth magnatic field. humpback whales have a magnatic material in their mind that allows them to feel earth's magnatic field, and use it for finding direction.
Error: magnatic Suggestion: magnetic
Error: stil Suggestion: No alternate word

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 276 250
No. of Characters: 1371 1200
No. of Different Words: 150 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.076 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.967 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.446 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.281 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.436 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.731 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.226 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4